I tried, thanks for watching. I really enjoyed yours as well. Great camera work, setting, sound, lighting. I thought it was really well done. :2vrolijk_08:
The Impossible Race
- Thread starter Troy Ruff
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I tried, thanks for watching. I really enjoyed yours as well. Great camera work, setting, sound, lighting. I thought it was really well done. :2vrolijk_08:
Susanne G.
Well-known member
What a lovely piece of slapstick! I enjoyed it. Excuse me, I also finished my first film, and it is difficult for me to make "some corrective comments". I hope that there is somebody else with more experience as me who can do it.
Susanne
Susanne
Rodney V. Smith
DVXFest Promo Guru
well perfect time for constructive criticism: I'm about to roll the film (again)
**TOTAL SPOILER ALERT**
Love the credits. really add to the feel. good introuductions to the characters as well. I'm enjoying your shots here.
Can't quite see that Nico is feeding tablets to the birds. his movements were a little too understated for that.
The singles on the girls would have played better if they were in a tighter shot for the water-pouring. its okay to be super ridiculous with those types of shots since they're hyper realistic.
A closer shot on Leon would have been cool as well.
Some close-ups on the exchanges between the chacracters would have been cool. You have the PERFECT close up on Nico, after the exchange, but i would have liked to have seen at least 3 closeups on the characters... a little more cinematography at play.
The finger shooting was a little too over the top for me. I spent the rest of the time wondering how he's going to go through the film without a finger tip. that's just me though.
More closeups on the start of the race would help to set some tension and character that woudl pay off nicely in the following bits.
Woudl have been nice to see a handful of marbles before he throws them. adds to the visuals and the following comedy. I like the shot of Leon falling, but thought that one should at least have still been moving forward... with it static it kind of takes it out of the race a little bit.
A medium shot after the wide on the bleachers when Ghost goes into the bleachers woudl have been priceless.
love the shot where she bits his arm nice edits there all around.
nice ending.
** END SPOILER**
It was good and funny and mostly well paced. Some shots were held a little too long (especially in the bleachers) but over all, it delivered on the funny.
**TOTAL SPOILER ALERT**
Love the credits. really add to the feel. good introuductions to the characters as well. I'm enjoying your shots here.
Can't quite see that Nico is feeding tablets to the birds. his movements were a little too understated for that.
The singles on the girls would have played better if they were in a tighter shot for the water-pouring. its okay to be super ridiculous with those types of shots since they're hyper realistic.
A closer shot on Leon would have been cool as well.
Some close-ups on the exchanges between the chacracters would have been cool. You have the PERFECT close up on Nico, after the exchange, but i would have liked to have seen at least 3 closeups on the characters... a little more cinematography at play.
The finger shooting was a little too over the top for me. I spent the rest of the time wondering how he's going to go through the film without a finger tip. that's just me though.
More closeups on the start of the race would help to set some tension and character that woudl pay off nicely in the following bits.
Woudl have been nice to see a handful of marbles before he throws them. adds to the visuals and the following comedy. I like the shot of Leon falling, but thought that one should at least have still been moving forward... with it static it kind of takes it out of the race a little bit.
A medium shot after the wide on the bleachers when Ghost goes into the bleachers woudl have been priceless.
love the shot where she bits his arm nice edits there all around.
nice ending.
** END SPOILER**
It was good and funny and mostly well paced. Some shots were held a little too long (especially in the bleachers) but over all, it delivered on the funny.
Gary Sconce
Veteran
LOL! You just described almost all of the shots that didn't make it in due to time. They were almost all shot, and will probably be in the longer version to be made later for the DVD. Troy was very complete on the shot list for the crew. There is even a music video we may make...
We really had loads of fun making this, we would have laughed until we cried, but it was 103 degrees out there and we were frying like slabs of steak on a BBQ. I teased Troy that my Hypercam became the "Hypersweat". :evil:
Great job Troy!!!:grin:
Rodney V. Smith
DVXFest Promo Guru
this would make an AWESOME music video! Sorry I pointed out all of the holes that you guys had planned to fix 
. Do you have those in the can and can they make it into the edit? It doesn't necessarily have to be longer either to get those shots in. Just a few little grace notes to help sell the visuals even more strongly.
. Do you have those in the can and can they make it into the edit? It doesn't necessarily have to be longer either to get those shots in. Just a few little grace notes to help sell the visuals even more strongly.
Gary Sconce
Veteran
this would make an AWESOME music video! Sorry I pointed out all of the holes that you guys had planned to fix
That is up to Troy, but he is very creative and will probably do it.
(He is moderately insane too...
... can ya tell by the flim?)
Rodney V. Smith
DVXFest Promo Guru
just a wee bit crazy... but only a little bit
cheers dudes :beer:
cheers dudes :beer:
this would make an AWESOME music video! Sorry I pointed out all of the holes that you guys had planned to fix
Yes I totally agree with you on those shots you pointed out. Thank you for your critiques, I am trying to learn as much as I can. So really thank you. I do have most of those shots you talked about, that will make it in the final edit. As for your all the close ups, I realized after editing it all for DVXuser that I didnt have enough closeups. Completely agree. Thanks again for your help, and comments.
That is up to Troy, but he is very creative and will probably do it.
(He is moderately insane too...
Arent we all a bit CRAZY! ahahahah! I mine why else would we stay out all hours of the night shooting film, staying away from out families and being completely obsessed with the story line and getting this done as fast as we can. :grin:
Mark Johnson
The Dude Abides
Loved the film Troy. I especially love the announcer-guy who I loved in Matt's film. That guy's a chameleon and is a great character actor.
For me, the crowd in the stands was awesome. That farts guy!!! OMG! Laughed my ass off.
Thanks for putting this little puppy together and for being fearless with the comedy!
For me, the crowd in the stands was awesome. That farts guy!!! OMG! Laughed my ass off.
Thanks for putting this little puppy together and for being fearless with the comedy!
Blaine
Mr. Hollywood
This had some great potential and some missed opportunities. I thought the shooting of the bystander was funny and would have loved to have seen more of that type of madness in this piece. I would have also liked to have seen more done with the "crowd", perhaps a multitude of changing "posters". It would have pushed it more toward Hot Shots or Airplane!
On the technical side, the opening with the car interior was a bit tough because of the blown out exterior. This is extremely common with interior/exterior shot and trying to get the correct exposure for either.
Good job for a first entry. Take advantage of the local talent pool to learn and improve. :thumbsup:
Tom Shortridge
Well-known member
While this flick might not have had the greatest cinematography or acting or story or what have you, everything about it was very solid. But most importantly, it felt like everyone involved in the flick had fun making it. Just a lot of heart (something I really enjoyed about Be Kind, Rewind) pumped into this baby.
And the signs in the stands were hilarious.
And the signs in the stands were hilarious.
Ya I spent alot of time going over everything over and over and over to make sure that all the small thngs were thought out, for the most part, well I tried anyways.
My first film and had a ton of fun making it. I also had an amazing team of people helping out. Thanks for watching and responding how you liked it. :2vrolijk_08:
Matt Sconce
Veteran
Troy, Troy, what can I say? I had a ton of fun helping you make this and love your wacky sense of humor. This worked well and turned out great. Congratulations on a GREAT first film.
Thanks man, you where amazing to have on set. You have helped me become such a better Film maker, so thanks again for your help and ideas.
:2vrolijk_08:
Mark T. Aro
Well-known member
DITTO! It was great fun working on it. My son enjoyed being in it as well! The older girls just got back from a youth trip and they watched it a few times on the projector... they too enjoyed it as well!
Yes... great first film brother!
Yes... great first film brother!
Thanks man, I cant wait to see you! And thanks for all your help as well. You guys are the best!