The cookie jar

like the title. works well with the concept. didn't see that twist coming... I thought it'd be the mother... nice work on that. I like the simplicity here, it's quick to the point and wraps up clean. Overall, good story telling. My only qualm would deal with the performances which were a little dry for my taste.

Thanks for sharing.
 
How do I like my burger? WELL DONE! Err... corny... anyhoo.

I liked this! The hallway shots were really well done. Nice camera moves, and everything went with the feel of the story. I also liked the mom, she had this weird unsettling feel to her from the start that made me feel that something was amiss. Creepy... still good job sir!
 
Great opening shot! Not sure I would have followed it with such a close up. Might have went with some wide interior shots first. No matter.
The hallway dolly stuff was great even if there was a little wobble. The tension in the first scene as he reaches for the door was great.

Didn't see the ending/twist coming either.
Nice little gem in the fest.

Well done,

MAH
 
While I kinda saw it coming, I thought you did a great job on spinning expectations for the vampire genre. The dolly shots in the hallway, and the way you treated the climactic scene visually, were all very cool.

Thanks for submitting. Definitely a good one.
 
Nice little story with a good twist. Not quite sure what the white sheet was in the background of the room. Maybe it's normally there? but it does look a bit odd in the film. I mention this because elsewhere you have a nice attention to detail - I liked the bird and the "see no evil, hear no evil, speak no evil". The boys face turning monster looked great - simple but effective. Good job, thanks.
 
Thank you everyone for your comments.

Unfortunately, I have not been able to comment until now and I only have a minute.

On October 20, my best friend and business partner, Henry "Hank" MacCaslin, passed away. I didn't think I'd be able to submit this piece, but thanks to Zac Heileson's help, we made it through post. Zac also was uncredited for the VFX work.

I am currently dealing with the very difficult task(s) in the wake of Hank's passing. This is a first for me and if anyone has gone through this then you know how difficult it is.

I really want to address each comment, but won't be able to do so for a few days. Also, I want very badly to view the entries....but that will also be a few days.

I am very pleased to see so many positive comments and we couldn't be more proud of our film.

Again, thank you for the comments.

Chris
 
So Sorry for your loss :-(

Surprised there are way more comments on your film yet. Here's mine:
Cool flick, caught me by total surprise. Great version of the AE demon face, I've seen a lot and that one rocked!! Nice build of the tension. The only thing that bothered me was the mother said "never to go in there", but the food was for the next day so maybe if she just said "I told you not to go in there". Not sure why he'd need a batt since he's such a crazed monster, but that led us to a good shift in perspective.
Strong Beg. mid. and end

Well Done :-)
 
Nice work building tension and flipping expectations. Being monsterfest, I looked for the twist, but then you effectively kept me off guard, so I was like: "wait, am I right?"

Scary, creepy atmosphere. Second film to actually give me a scare.

I'd be curious to see a version without the music being so heavy handed and sound effects. There was nothing wrong with them per se, and that kind of music might be the obvious choice, but I would love to see it with maybe none and minimal sound effects and atmospherics.

Good work.
 
I liked the story, and the special effects on the kid when he transformed into the monster.... Also there where plenty of nice shots.
 
So why is this film called The Cookie Jar? I watched it twice and all I want to say is he ate a cookie and became a vampire...or just showing the fact that he was hungry. The vampire effect on the kid was cool, did not see that coming!
 
EditPhish said:
I did NOT see it coming that the kid would turn out to be the monster... not at all... so huge props for inventiveness! I like to be surprised :)

Seems you had some sound issues... everything seemed really "hot", if you know what I mean. I could hear hiss in the dialogue. I wasn't crazy about what I assume you were using as an exterior wind sound effect (it just sounded like noise to me).

Overall though, I enjoyed your entry and it scored it higher than quite a few! Vampires seemed a popular option in this fest, but yours was unique!
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How about a SPOILER ALERT!!!!!!!!!

you know, in the rare cases that someone reads the thread before they watch. I heard that has happened.
 
Chris_Keaton said:
Nice film. It really seemed like you put care and effort into the story. Sure it was the old getting caught with your hand in the cookie jar, but the twist was satisfying. I might be alone here, but this rated high on my favorite list. Good job.
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(Elvis voice) Thank you, thank yu very muuch.
 
Hardcore said:
But am I the only one perplexed with the blue? Or am I the only one who sees it?
Everyone was blue, and the blood was blue, not really a problem but I was wondering if it had any significance at all.
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Did it make you sad? Why so blue?

We colored the background a slight teal, however, all the skin tones are spot on and should be fine. So, it could be possible that you are seeing a slight teal.....but blue, no. Might be time to color-calibrate your monitor.
 
Michael Anthony Horrigan said:
Great opening shot! Not sure I would have followed it with such a close up. Might have went with some wide interior shots first. No matter.
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We kind of went a little Mamet-esque to open here.
Wide/establishing shots are certainly the bread and butter of many a film, and are key to setting up just about any scene. As we know, they serve many purposes....chiefly, number one, so the viewer/audience doesn't become disoriented. We purposely held tight as long as we could to open to heighten the suspense. We wanted to retain the mystery for as long as we could, and I'd like to believe that this works here.

I have enjoyed the films that you have entered into these DVXfests and I find you to be a very good filmmaker. My opinion simply differs here.
 
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