"Turning Point" - A Hawk Teflon short

That's some heavy stuff there guys! I kept waiting for one of you to fart in the car. You know if Zaza directed this, there would be farts in the car.
Seriously though, really good acting by the both of you, good dialogue, and the shots were clean and crisp. Well done! I don't have any negatives to say.

Alternate thought: The door could have opened and your dad could have been a zombie!
 
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Za, i watched Hawk's after I watched yours, and as Hawk and Marlon were doing their thing (again, some of the strongest acting this fest, seriously.) i kept thinking about the end of your movie!
 
Hawk.... I liked the concept...and I get it that 'HE' was scared...but it was ScareFest and I wanted to be scared.
That's not to take anything away from this wonderful effort.

....and wash the windows in that car will ya'? :happy:

Spoiler:
My thoughts:
- Again, loved the concept, but wanted a good scare on Halloween!
- Both you guys did a great job with the acting, felt very natural and I'm sure it was shot out of sequence (I think). Great job putting that all together.
- What do you have against magicians? :happy:
- Audio problem @2:45...."I'm pretty sure it is" was only on the left side. D'ough!
- Too 'drama' for me...dragged on a bit.
- Nice job getting this done quickly (I did the same with my film).

Hats off to you both on a good short!

PS.... and for the love of God, please learn how to use the 'spoiler' button! :Drogar-BigGrin(DBG)
 
Hey, guys. This was really nice. Simple setup but it looked and sounded very good. Just one or two minor sound issues, already mentioned above.
Well acted, edited and a solid story. I have a feeling that you're going to take a hit on the lack of 'scariness' though.
I get it. I see how you used the theme.

I just think this was far better suited for DramaFest.

Still though, I really enjoyed it. Pretty polished work for such a last minute entry.
Job well done.

PS - That poster is pure AWESOMENESS!!
 
Hey guys, well put together drama that has a different take on scary... but that's where I'm gonna have to ding you. All through this I kept waiting for a twist, a change, a surprise... anything that was going to jump out and scare us with its originality and sheer awesomeness. We never got that. You left me feeling hollow and empty. Truthfully you could have cut it in half and gotten a much better effect.. THEN turn the dad onto a zombie and a giant battle ensues! with dinosaurs!
 
We gotta give Hawk a pass because the poor guy hates horror, he gets freaked out. Can you imagine Hawk shooting a horror film and then having to edit it? He'd lose his mind! hey... that's a good plot. Trademarked.
 
Ha, thanks guys. Hopefully next fest I can bring some dinosaurs and exploding cars in (I'll need to contact Gord for the 3D rendering).

I actually had a couple of different scripts from a buddy that were "scary" scripts (scary to the viewer), but I just couldn't get emotionally invested in it. I wanted to make something, but shooting something you aren't completely invested in will make you lax on the shoot and edit. I didn't want to waste my time, and especially not Marlon's time (he has a bucketful of projects he's working on already). I knew I'd take a hit for it not being scary, but it was a risk worth taking for me.

And, yeah, Matt's right. I can't imagine editing a scary movie. I would not be happy.

And Zaza, I have a kid now. I can't afford window cleaner. :grin:
 
REVIEW!

Alright I actually really enjoyed this, but same as above, not fitting for the fest in my opinion.

What I liked - You told a simple story, driven by dialogue, you captured the emotion and you did a great job of that. You told the story with like 4 camera angles or something? That in itself is a challenge to keep it moving and interesting so good job there. Also, acting was VERY well done by both.

What I didn't like as much - same as above, one audio issue I noticed and the theme of the short, but besides that I had a couple things. First, in the closeup of the driver, I did not like the windshield or whatever was going across the top right corner, it cut off his head and was distracting to me. In the wider closeup of the driver I think you missed focus a few times. It seems like it was focused for when he was looking at the passenger, but you cut to it a few times when he is looking through the window/windshield and it seems a bit off to me. Lastly, I think it could have been more powerful to hear the doorbell while still on the outside shot, then cut to black and hear a door opening sound. This way we know they at least made contact. I would rather be left with the cliffhanger of how did it go?did they get along? etc, than the one of was the dad even home? Not huge, just an opinion.

Anyways, again it was really well done, I enjoyed watching it!
 
What? This isn't drama fest, you should've saved this for next fest.

It looked good and you guys did a good job, but I wasn't scared once while watching it.

I was also disappointed that there were no dinosaurs or car explosions. Seriously disappointed. :)
 
beautifuly shot, acting was fantastic, Not what I would call your typical horror, but I can see how this could be percieved as being scary. I would be scared as well, if I went through life without ever meeting my dad, then sitting down to talk to him for the first time. Anyone would be. overall I thought it was excellent work.
 
Awesome and refreshing psychological interpretation of scare and what is scary. Solid acting, really enjoyed this.
 
Truly horrifying if he opened door with a long horn shirt on. Well a different take on being scared, sort of a 3rd person POV and a little heart felt to boot. I got it, I liked it. Everything was exposed and framed nicely. No complaints.
 
If anyone has a bigger head of hair than the guy in the opening shot of the diner in The Traveler, I want to see it.
 
I liked this scene, and how you covered it. The actors did a great job. I wondered if a polarizer filter might have helped with the windshield shot. I think the one things that kept me hanging through the whole dialog was that it sounded so natural and focused on the problem that this guy was having with his father, and the more he talked the more on edge I became because I knew that without a doubt that any second now some absolutly freaky sh$% was going to happen and I didn't know where it was gonna come from. So you can understand how let down I was when nothing of the sort happened.

I think as filmmakers we need to know our technical craft but we also need to understand GENRE and how important it really is. It's the fundemental way that we relate to stories... we dont watch movies we watch genres.... If my wife wants romantic comedy and I bring back a spy thriller, there is hell to pay.

As a filmmaker to promise one genre and deliver another might be one of the most heinous sins of all. As much as I like the scene and your actors performance I have dock marks for 'Genre Bad Behavior' ( can you tell I have kids? )
 
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