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Scott Lovejoy

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Hi all.

I think I'm going to come in just under the wire.
 
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Either a last minute or you've already shot and you wanted to post late.
Either way, looking forward to your entry!
 
I feel like you could have benefited from having a good soundtrack... it would have helped the pacing along (which didn't seem bad). I don't know that you nailed either the comedic aspects or the creepier aspects of the story itself, but I thought there was interesting potential.

You sound was too low (especially compared to all the other movies).

It definitely had amusing aspects to it, and it looked good. Was a middle-of-the-road scorer for me. Keep it up though, you can do better!
 
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I feel like you could have benefited from having a good soundtrack... it would have helped the pacing along (which didn't seem bad).
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Agreed. Sometimes we wear all the hats and some don't fit. I have many problems in the sound area, and always have a difficulty choosing what to put where. In the end I didn't put anything anywhere, which was certainly a bad choice.

The pacing is okay, but I see a glaring problem with the length of one scene in particular. I wish I had chopped the dialog down before shooting, because it wasn't going to cut right after shooting.

I don't know that you nailed either the comedic aspects or the creepier aspects of the story itself, but I thought there was interesting potential.
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Aye. There's a definite tone problem.

You sound was too low (especially compared to all the other movies).
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Noted.

It definitely had amusing aspects to it, and it looked good. Was a middle-of-the-road scorer for me. Keep it up though, you can do better!
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Thanks, I intend to try.
 
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I enjoyed this. You know about the soud and that the lack of soundtrack made it seem a little sparse.

The overall flow was good and kept me interested.

Well done.
 
Hey Scott,

I'm so glad you took my feedback in a positive light... I really only mean it that way to everyone! We all took notes (at our watch-party) as we watched each film last night, so maybe my comments aren't in the friendliest tone because they're transcribed from notes to myself, but I know JTyner and I will benefit from constructive criticism and comments on what we did wrong as well as right.

I did enjoy your entry so good work!
 
Definitely had audio problems but the story also took awhile to get going. It was simple story but maybe a bit too simple overall. Not enough tension or suspense to get me through the six minutes.
 
Yes, there were some major technical issues. Yes, the story didn't work in some places.

BUT...

A poo pooing great hook... a vampire who doesn't have fangs! Brilliant. Rewrite that idea and really do something with it. Wish I thought of it. :thumbsup:

Pacing was fine for me. I thought the coffee shop scenes work out very well. Very visual, not a lot of dialogue. Very nice.

Good job. Thanks for sharing!
 
Take what you've learned from the comments here and come back at us next fest. There was a lot to enjoy here, technical issues aside.

I also thought that both actresses were quite good. The girl in the coffee shop was great! Very natural on screen. Interesting story as well.

Keep at it.

MAH
 
Hey, just dropping in to say that I thought the underlining premise of your film is one of the better ones I've watched so far. The concept is creative, but like others have said above, the production value and pacing didn't seem to be doing it proper justice.

As far as pacing, some of the editing could be tighter. Less is more! In my opinion, I would have cut or greatly reduced the scene where the guy checks his calendar.

One thing I noticed is that your lighting appeared pretty flat -- particularly in that first kitchen scene with the open refrigerator. It stood out as amateur-looking. The dialogue shots were well composed, but some additional thought to the lighting could have made a big difference in making your scenes pop.

Overall, good execution of shots and idea. I noticed you're in Boston. Film student by chance?
 
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