The Traveler

Excellent! Solid acting and great pacing. It's nice to see a film that focuses on the story and is efficient. I don't mind the chroma key interiors of the car and the VFX. It adds to the unreal-ness of the movie. Great cinematography overall!

*SPOILERS*

The final shot of the victim in the backseat-epic! As mentioned above: give us more of that Devil in disguise!
 
Loved the colors of the opening title & background. The way you swapped the "Presented by" to the Title using the tree was well done.
Agree with others - an Alfred Hitchcock feel. While they're talking is the waitress still listening? Nothing shows her busy elsewhere.
2:06 why the B$@#* runs the guy over and leaves him! Feed her to the monsters! 3:27 - YES!!! Munch time!!!
Darn - that is too nice a way to send her. Hmmm ... why a month later for the cop vs hours for the lady?
The last monster face didn't work well. The actually brains blowing out wasn't needed - just a fade to black and the SFX would have been more powerful.
Excellent acting. Enjoyed much. Best I've seen now out of 14 viewed so far. Well done - look forward to seeing more from you.
 
SPOILER REVIEW:

The good: I liked the shots in the diner. Would have liked to have seen a couple slider shots, but that's just me (and Zaza, I'm sure). Good job on the phone, as well. The green screen stuff worked as well. The special effects really worked well for this. At first I thought the acting was a little over the top, but the more I watched, the more it fit. It worked well together. I like the music too. It really pulled this piece together even more.

The not as good: The font. Yuck. :grin: (though it was pretty great putting the slates behind the moving objects :thumbsup:) I think the coloring was a little too over the top. I would think maybe desaturating it to about half for the era. The cops lines were a little weird to me, too.

Favorite part: Oddly enough, the lighting inside the SUV with the woman and the traveler. Looked good.

I really think you have a great piece here, sir.
 
Taylormade... you are the VFX king! This could have been an ad for Video Copilot tutorials.... I think they are all in there. :happy:

I loved this film, really good acting along with the top-notch technical stuff makes for a really fun film. Was I ever scared? No, but who cares, you
got the devil, the cheating wife, the zombie, the cop, the nosey waitress, gunshots, blood and train crashes...where was the kitchen sink?

Great job... I can only imagine how much work went into this one.
 
LOL, I loved the cheesy opening with matching font. I would've expected the lady to be a little more shaken up before the dude showed up. Gotta polish those special effects. I think the final suicide was overkill, I'd have stopped with the final line from the devil. And about lines, I don't think you got the required line exactly right. :) It was a fun short, congrats!
 
This was a lot of fun. Some of the dialogue seemed a bit odd, especially after certain events.
Still, it all seemed to work for this movie. Holy SFX! :shocked:

Nice work. I really liked the scene with the
Spoiler:
train
That was a lot of fun.

This had a great look and feel to it.
Loved the ending as well. Although I think I would have preferred that he took him for a ride. :)

Fun stuff!
 
I wasn't crazy about the bloody font. I loved the opening shot of the diner's neon sign. I loved the diner. Super cool location. Actress behind counter could have had more sass to her. Traveler actor one of the best most natural delivery of lines of fest. I did feel the distress from the actress in SUV, so that's good.

Nitpick on the detective's notes you had a blank memo paper insert shot. Would have been nice if he had something written there before you cut to the insert shot.

The FX could have been better. But what I liked is that you had a story and told it from start to finish. Give you props for that. Was it original? Not really, but it was interesting.
 
Nitpick on the detective's notes you had a blank memo paper insert shot. Would have been nice if he had something written there before you cut to the insert shot.

That was actually his first question so the pad was blank, but if it bothered you it obviously didn't work.
Thanks for the review. I agree, Will Shaw, who played the Traveler really did a great job.
As to the effects, I'm still working on the greenscreen stuff - just not enough time to totally work out the correct balance before the deadline. What other effects didn't work for you?
 
Taylor - then have him write some notes if you're going to insert it, otherwise, just cut out the insert, you don't really need it.
 
this was in my top tier. I didnt like the second twist of the traveller going after the investigator, but up till then I thought this was a really entertaining little short and very ambitious too. Defo look forward to seeing more of your work.
 
Hey there! This was a nice rounded story, it was amusing and darkly delightful. I think it could have done with greater tension though (that abstract feeling is a killer to build in a film) but i think if you had done that it would have combined well with the black humour of the traveller.

Some have mentioned the graphics/footage etc could be improved - yep true true, and hell it always can, whatever the film heck...

I don't think your film suffers too much for this particular thing - but its worth mentioning and that is that (particualrly US filmmakers) feel the supernatural need to repeat every gol' darn twist just to slam it into our heads as if we didn't get it the first time. Its the beaaaauuuutiful language of mainstream American television (they test it on Miley Cyrus/Laci Green fans) and if they get it - its good to go. But films of your type don't need to repeat the twist, its more inclined to incite a groan from an intelligent audience.

Its a device thats sometimes necessary, (and like i said i think it actually works as its amusing and macabre in your film) but its sooo overused, i thought it worth bringing up!

Good luck and well done!
 
Thanks everyone. This is the second time we entered a fest, so we were all very honored just to make the top six. We appreciate your votes.
 
I liked the story. And the framing was also nice.

The sound was good, but here and there some small details like some cuts where noticible (you can hear a difference in "ambiance sound" between one shot and onother (opposite).
I think it has to to also with boom and lav. (1 person boomed, another one laved).

Also the acting.... for the guy it's ok, he can be like that... The woman I find it less... She isn't scared to me. And remeber: don't tell it show it. It's better to show she's scared (by freaking out, yelling, whaaaaaa whaaaaa heeeelp, whaaaaa oh my god whaaaa), rather then to tell it (I'm scared).
 
dre83 said:
She isn't scared to me. And remeber: don't tell it show it. It's better to show she's scared (by freaking out, yelling, whaaaaaa whaaaaa heeeelp, whaaaaa oh my god whaaaa), rather then to tell it (I'm scared).
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I agree - but it's the required line. Can't win them all.
 
One of the required lines. Not making any excuses, I didn't like the line, but couldn't figure any other place to put it.
 
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