Pupae

great title. i'm interested to see if insects are involved at all... or if you were just referring to dolls. either way, i'm looking forward to reading it :)
 
Seems Tuesday (or Wednesday) can't come fast enough. I'm so looking forward to reading all these.

Pupae - dolls or insects? Soon to be revealed!

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Up until now I have never been a big fan of the genre (snoozed during Star Wars, threw my hands up in disgust during The Island) and cringed when I saw the official announcement. 'Aw crap' was all I could muster. However, once I started doing a little research just to see what's out there, low and behold, I was sucked in.

I think my biggest complaint with SciFi is that it seems to trade away the 'human stories' for SFX and robots and eye candy. In truth, I can't think of one film that really blew me away for story. FX, yeah, great stuff. Who will ever forget Yoda? But story? Yawn.

Judging from the taglines and a history of great creativity here, no doubt my anti-scifi slant is about to change. Kicking and screaming of course, but about to change.

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I felt the same way about Star Wars! Not my genre either...except for Star Trek. shhhh..don't tell!

I can't wait to read this one. Best plotline I've seen so far. :thumbsup:
 
alex whitmer said:

While capturing forbidden music from old paper and ceramic fragments, a man stumbles upon a horrible and ancient truth. He now faces certain death to protect this truth.​
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I remember seeing a Myth Busters episode along these lines. It's a great idea. Can't wait to read it!
 
Hey Mike, glad to see you pop in. A rare visit!

Hopefully Pupae will be at least mildly entertaining to some, brilliant for a few, and maybe nauseating for the rest!

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Alex, this is a fantastic script! First off, you're playing with a genre close to my heart. Not only is it Sci-Fi, but it's dystopian so-different-that-nothing-I-know-matters Sci-Fi. Yet, you give us enough detail that we follow what's going on. There are strikingly powerful visuals in the script and I'd love to see it on the screen. You also really demonstrate how to handle the six-page script with the scope of your story. Excellent job.

The only critique I have, and it's a small one, is the use of the word "sh*t." It seemed out of place for the character and for the setting. Maybe it's just me, but current curse words in Science Fiction that's not grounded in our current society has always bugged me.

I really enjoyed the script!
 
Wow. You totally had me. Didn't see that coming at all. I went Biblical...but I'm a Religious Studies student, so that's expected.

Just one question. Why did Hypatia have an abundance of body hair? Was that somehow connected to the evolution?
 
nitramlehcar said:
Wow. You totally had me. Didn't see that coming at all. I went Biblical...but I'm a Religious Studies student, so that's expected.

Just one question. Why did Hypatia have an abundance of body hair? Was that somehow connected to the evolution?
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Yes, the de-evolution of a select group has already begun. Hypatia would be maybe Cro-Magnon, and then we later see Neanderthal.

Biblical? Much better than going postal!

alex
 
krestofre said:
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Favorite of mine as well. Always like to use is as a theme when teaching English to Poli Sci Profs. Never dull.

You're right on the Sh#t. I hated it, but couldn't find another word that expressed what I wanted. I was enjoying a brain-freeze on the last draft when that crept in.

Thanks for the read.

Alex
 
I liked the script, you have a very accomplished style.

But very quickly- I don't personally like character descriptions such as 'with an eye for detail', as they're not visible attributes and should be shown through action (as you pretty much do).

And unless I'm very much mistaken, Neanderthals and the Cro-Magnon co-existed and don't follow in the evolutionary process. I think the Neanderthals were in fact made extinct by them... We are descended from the homo-sapiens side of things I think, although someone else is probably better placed to confirm that.
 
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And unless I'm very much mistaken, Neanderthals and the Cro-Magnon co-existed and don't follow in the evolutionary process. I think the Neanderthals were in fact made extinct by them... We are descended from the homo-sapiens side of things I think, although someone else is probably better placed to confirm that.
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I believe that this is true but the Cro-Magnon was deemed to be a more evolved form of man at that time. So even though they crossed paths I don't think it is a mistake to place them in that order, as far as evolution goes, or devolution. :beer:

Alex, this was poo pooing brilliant! I only wish I had the skills (SFX-wise) to pull this puppy off. I was sucked right in and you really nailed the theme of this Fest.
Really, this was some great script writing!

I fell in love with the main characters instantly and cared deeply about what was going to happen to them. Loved Hypatia's goodbye to her Mom.

10 Stars!
 
technically, there's really nothing to comment on because you pretty much know and follow the rules... you already know this though. plus, it's obvious (from my entry) that i still have a lot to learn before i can tell what's right or wrong, and why.

i'm having problems opening PDF docs right now, so i'll have to remember your story from last night's reading.... actually, i'm going to try another PC and see if i can find one that works. grrr, more later....
 
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