"Brunnen" by Soullen Ten

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"Brunnen"

A woman stranded in the desert with a bag of gold.

Written/Shot/Directed by AJ Brooks
Woman: Rebecca Denniston

Thank you everyone who watched the film. My girlfriend and I took a day trip to Eastern Oregon and shot this a few days before the deadline. I took breaks from editing Blood Price to edit Brunnen, and even told Becky at one point "Sorry dear, but I don't think I'm going to finish this in time."
Thanks for the comments everyone, I'd love to cut this film to half the running time and do some Foley/SFX and get it scored.
 
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You locations were nice and you shot it well. I enjoyed the mystery of the story and thought you handled it quite tastefully, too. My biggest complaint was that I didn't feel her thirst. She looked far too fresh (not even a 'glow') for me to believe that she was on the verge of dehydration. I would have liked to feel more desperation on her part to really sell the story.
 
Hi Soul, Your actress was solid, good work. I liked the shedding of the clothes at the end, it felt like redemption. I think you could have tightened up the editing a bit and cut the overall short down a touch without losing anything, but it certainly works as is. I like the score but i also think some sound design (maybe some wind?) would have helped draw me in a bit more. Good work though, i like your cinematography and your location and most of all: the water pump prop. very cool!
 
This one gets my vote for most annoying editing :Drogar-BigGrin(DBG)

It's shot beautifully. The location was great. The idea of a Faustian water pump is clever. Her discovery of its accepted tender (in addition to gold) was handled very well with the wind blowing her scarf onto the scale. The idea of a perverted Faustian water pump is even more clever. The music reaching crescendo as she casts away the cup of water and throws her gold pouch strap over her shoulder was perfect.

My only niggle is that I never thought she was dying of thirst. She's fun to look at obviously but she really didn't sell the "lost and dying in the desert" vibe. This is, perhaps, a make-up issue rather than an acting one. Despite the cowgirl clothes, she looked more like a mall-rat than a weary desert traveler.

It would have been funny if a sheriff and a few deputies met her on the other side of the hill and then after a tense beat we realize they don't recognize her without her clothes and even go so far as to ask if she's seen an Asian girl in tan slacks with a brown hat and a scarf around...lol
 
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Hi Soul

Congrats on getting your film in, and bravo on choosing to make it a silent film. It's always neat seeing films that go such a different route.

As a silent film, the music was critical, and fortunately it worked well. I particularly liked the introductory song. I agree with previous comments that she looked far too fresh to be that desperate for water - a little grime would have gone a long way. There was some nice camerawork and good slo-mo in there as well. Thanks for putting this in!
 
I really enjoyed this film. The actress was great as was the location, the music and some of the cinematography. I love what you did with the camera when she shed her clothes. Honestly I was anticipating seeing the big reveal, but the way you did that didn't disappoint at all. Very classy and kudos to the actress for even doing that. Very nice work and the drinking scenes at the end were very touching.
 
Blaine said:
You locations were nice and you shot it well. I enjoyed the mystery of the story and thought you handled it quite tastefully, too. My biggest complaint was that I didn't feel her thirst. She looked far too fresh (not even a 'glow') for me to believe that she was on the verge of dehydration. I would have liked to feel more desperation on her part to really sell the story.
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I enjoyed it though. and she is a cutie.
 
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