--[] When Stars Collide []-- by MAH

Michael Anthony Horrigan

Michael Anthony Horrigan

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A man and a woman. Two loves. One betrayal.




Written by Michael Anthony Horrigan
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Alright I read it. CRAP! It's all crap! Anyone knows Spaceballs rules the universe, duh! But seriously nicely written and the banter is fantastic. Great job. Now if you could trim it to one act that could be performed on stage I know where you might be able to unload it.
 
Just read it :)

I liked it, enjoyed the dialogue, very nice. It was written well, clean and precise paragraphs. And the humour kept alive throughout.
I've no relation to Star Trek though so couldn't really relate to some of the dialogue, but it didn't break the script for me. The only thing I reacted to, and this is nitpicking, was that she was screaming as she ran into the living room. Maybe because you hadn't written what kind of a scream it was, it felt a bit awkward to me.

That's all I've got for now, might come back and add more later.
And Love the title.
 
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Hi MAH,

Just read you script.

As a Trekkie who also enjoys Star Wars I understood the whole thing, and could understand both sides. You've made two good characters, whome I was happy when they made up at the end.

Overall, an enjoyable script, but it isn't going to be a star in everyone's eye!
 
Somebody call the Pun Police on DE. Shoot to kill. :)

And MAH, I hope you're happy--you've now totally spoiled Patrick Stewart's catchphrase for me. :D

As my last ScriptFest entry probably proved, I'm a sucker for fanboy bickering, so I enjoyed this one a lot. My one nitpick would be that, even after Michael has disowned Episodes I - III, Emily still makes them pretty much her exclusive focus. If she's really going after him, she should take some digs at IV - VI, especially after he goes after TOS. :)

But that's a minor point, and doesn't spoil the overall enjoyment. Nicely done.
 
Captain Pierce said:
Somebody call the Pun Police on DE. Shoot to kill. :)

And MAH, I hope you're happy--you've now totally spoiled Patrick Stewart's catchphrase for me. :D
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LOL! Thanks, man. :D

I think any good Trek fan will go for blood. We all know that there is plenty of blood in the Episode I - III water.
We can try and block it out all we want.

She went for blood, a quick kill. She got it. :)

MAH
 
Hi Michael. I read this last night and again this morning. I loved it. Nerd love.

Emily's secret shame. So funny. Great title too. The visuals made me laugh...especially the bobble head. And of course the Princess Leia gold bikini.

Fun idea and fun characters. Just...fun! :)
 
MML said:
Hi Michael. I read this last night and again this morning. I loved it. Nerd love.

Emily's secret shame. So funny. Great title too. The visuals made me laugh...especially the bobble head. And of course the Princess Leia gold bikini.

Fun idea and fun characters. Just...fun! :)
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Thanks so much. I enjoyed and commented on your script as well.

I'm happy that it seems to be hitting home for so many people.

I've been privy to a few "Stars Colliding" myself. :)

MAH
 
Well done! I really enjoyed this script. It's a quick read with fun characters and entertaining dialogue. I can definitely see a Star Trek and Star Wars fan having a conversation like this. Good job!
 
The war between these foes is as old as time itself raging from convention hall to convention hall, truly this is a cry for peace.

Haha, it was a lot of fun. Good banter, believable characters, focused and it wraps up nicely. Really got a kick out of the bobble-head imagery. Probably one of the best closing lines.
 
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