SHORT: Turning Silver

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CColton

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A man's day seems to get continually worse, but the day's end makes it all worth it.


This is my first film so I'd appreciate constructive criticism. Please take the 5 minutes to watch it and let me know what you think. It's streaming from Vimeo in 1080p so you may need to let it buffer a bit before playing it. Depending on your browser, you may need to follow the link and watch it on Vimeo in order to play it in full screen.

All criticism is welcome, provided that it is respectful. I can share technical/production details if anyone is curious.
 
Not to bad, i think you could have trimmed it a little, the beginning starts a little slow for me, maybe take 40 - 60 secs and should flow better.

You had some nice shots, nice job nailing exposure for the most part (although you had a little trouble with some shots, still good on the whole)

Sound was pretty good, acting ok, but im guessing they are all amatuers.

I would have liked to see less of the begining and more of the ending, maybe a little shot of them laughing at the table etc...

jon
 
jonE5 said:
Not to bad, i think you could have trimmed it a little, the beginning starts a little slow for me, maybe take 40 - 60 secs and should flow better.

You had some nice shots, nice job nailing exposure for the most part (although you had a little trouble with some shots, still good on the whole)

Sound was pretty good, acting ok, but im guessing they are all amatuers.

I would have liked to see less of the begining and more of the ending, maybe a little shot of them laughing at the table etc...

jon
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Yeah, the beginning was definitely too long.

Yes, all amateur actors.

Can you tell me what shots you thought were improperly exposed? I'm curious whether the exposure was the problem or my grading was the problem.
 
The one shot i noticed exposure was wonky is when he walks out side, (this is really tough, and i was thinking of how i would have handled it and im not sure i even have an answer, maybe someone with more experience could chime in?)

Basically your indoors was a little dark, and your outside was blown out. Maybe an ND filter to drop the background, and light the actor from inside?
 
jonE5 said:
The one shot i noticed exposure was wonky is when he walks out side, (this is really tough, and i was thinking of how i would have handled it and im not sure i even have an answer, maybe someone with more experience could chime in?)

Basically your indoors was a little dark, and your outside was blown out. Maybe an ND filter to drop the background, and light the actor from inside?
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Do you mean the shot of him coming out of the building where the camera is along the wall with all the papers tacked to it? If so, that's a difficult scene because of its dynamic range. Next time I would've lit him. I didn't do as much artificial light as I would've liked for this short, because we were trying to get it done before all the actors left town, and we barely finished it in time. My next short will have more time put into it. I've already got one script written and an idea for a third short, so stay tuned!

EDIT: Also, I was already using a variable ND for that shot, so that I could shoot at f1.7 to get the narrow DOF. Mostly I just should've lit him :/
 
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