Spielberg's a Hack!

Script kept my interest and was funny. You nailed the banter between the two guys, one who is into sci-fi and one who is not. I liked the analogy of the fish. I thought the Nazi alien materializing out of nowhere was not as strong as the rest of the script. I don’t know what else you could do though to end it though. This script has a very light tone and a cynical sense of satiric humor towards Spielberg’s work and sci-fi geeks. There wasn’t a whole lot of plot, but the conversation between the two friends was fun to read. I don’t feel that a 6 page script necessarily needs an intricate plot all the time. As long as something interesting happens within those 6 pages that’s good enough for me.

Now you have to write the sequel: LUCAS HAS TOO MUCH F***ING MONEY aka THE PLOT TO KILL JAR JAR.
 
Script kept my interest and was funny. You nailed the banter between the two guys, one who is into sci-fi and one who is not. I liked the analogy of the fish. I thought the Nazi alien materializing out of nowhere was not as strong as the rest of the script. I don’t know what else you could do though to end it though. This script has a very light tone and a cynical sense of satiric humor towards Spielberg’s work and sci-fi geeks. There wasn’t a whole lot of plot, but the conversation between the two friends was fun to read. I don’t feel that a 6 page script necessarily needs an intricate plot all the time. As long as something interesting happens within those 6 pages that’s good enough for me.

Now you have to write the sequel: LUCAS HAS TOO MUCH F***ING MONEY aka THE PLOT TO KILL JAR JAR.
LOL! I'll get on the Lucas script right away. :thumbsup:

Cheers,

Mike
 
i thought it was great. the only thing i'd change is the alien's dialog at the end. i think it would be funnier without it. the visual of a nazi alien is funny enough.

good luck with this one!
 
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