My first full TV spot.

the crane shot was rad!! i liked it alot (from a production POV) the only thing i think you could have improved on is shot variety. maybe show us how a portrait home looks from the outside? i got the feeling that it was all shot at once in the same location same lighting.. it made me feel "cramped" in the commercial. maybe just a split second shot of a family outside waving to somebody driving off haha i dunno... but overall amazing!
 
Nice job. I'm sure your client was pleased. Congrats.

I would have liked to see a bit more variety of shots. everything was wide. I'd like to see a little more coverage of the actors. It served it's purpose well but I felt that by staying wide the whole time it felt a little 70's tv comercial IMHO.

But the crane shot over the rail. Sweet. Loved it.

-rook
 
Lol. Great. but for some reason the girl with the tear in her pants bothered me..

what a weird thing to pick on. but yeah.
 
Thanks everyone for the feedback.

I wanted to do some exterior shots too, but the client's idea was to show how "big" their townhomes are.

The girl's pants with the hole in them bothers me, but I did not catch it until I got into editing. Hindsight.....oh well.

The clients are happy with the ruff cut and are ready for me to finish and make station dubs. :)

Hopefully this will be the first of many spots that I will get to direct.


dolby
 
I just got feedback from the client on second draft that is now posted. They love it!. :)

dolby
 
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