Lawrie's feedback for every film :)

The Sunshine List
Ironically the voice over dialogue in this film is exactly what my lady friend Sarah says juuuust about me (ooh yeah!) I appluad the exploration of love/sensuality/eroticism, even if it is explored with a kind of unintended grainy voyeur aesthetic! (Finally a good use from all those old sex tapes!!!) I think the voice over / script is okay, could do with refinement - less focus on how awesome her boobs are (and the repetition of those phrases) and muuuuch more variety (and abstract) visuals - that add up to show us her final form as it were! Interesting work, brave and original if in need of technical improvement!

The Ultimate Betrayel
I won't say too much as this is obviously made to entertain just the forum - and likewise as a member of the forum, i was giggling along at the injokes! teehee nice one.

Two Dicks - Suck it Kevin Smith
Righto well fairly vulgar comedy straight off the bat - no particularly likeable characters whatsoever!!! However it is amusing - frat style - though as high minded as i might like to be (im not really) i found myself chuckling along! I think the betrayal angle worked well enough, the misogynist tone (very slight) seemed a little degrading but thats just to my liberal euro sensibilities (your quite alright in the States hehe) Nicely shot, some hilarious acting. Reasonable and accomplished effort - well done.


Awee thanks Jason, it was cool, ill post a link tomorrow to the film we recently worked in - im uploading a high res to exposure room! Righto i think thats all the films, given feedback to all in the last 3 hours! PHEW!
 
Look Back and Laugh
I could almost seeee John Cusack in this! Charming comedy, shot decently, nicely performed, decently casted, reasonable pace, limited production values were a little too self evident with the 'bar' (despite the best efforts of that beer sign!) The story itself was amusing enough if a little slow at times. Overall i would say this is a decent effort that entertained me without blowing me away!
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Hey lawrie, thanks for the review. Very cool. This was a first-time entry, so I appreciate the feedback. Glad you saw it as a comedy, some of the humor is fairly subtle.

Looking forward to reading more reviews tomorrow when I have some free time.
 
I dig your reviews Lawrie. You have such a unique voice in your writing and your critiques are spot-on, imo. Thanks!
 
I see, yeah, that's the response I expected. Lawrie, just doesn't like a good soap opera. It could've used more Yeti.
 
smashedburrito, look up a few posts and you'll see that Lawrie mistakenly reviewed Taking Advantage under the heading for Stretched. Looks like he'll be reviewing yours soon.
 
Hi there Chris, I imagine you writing many scripts for directors/producers here, often pitched for what 'they' think they need - but you know, they often don't really know what they really need in script content. I'm sure many talented script writers here bemoan that fact, with original ideas shot down in exchange for lame contrived stuff that feels reassuring towards competition 'context'. But what benefit is it for a writer unless it is the very original qualities that you can uniquely express being produced? It's no succesful advert to show you can write to assure an indy microbudget filmmaker. Instead I'd rather see dangerous, interesting material produced from your scripts. Jibber Jabber!

Stretched
Poignant well thought out drama, elegantly shot, poetical and dreamlike, with perhaps an unnecessary fetishistic concern for cigarette puffs and blows (despite the films artistry, the French New Wave has passed! ;)

The performances were authentic, and held a mysticism throughout the film that was appealing, the story kept me engaged, and was subtly evocative of ideas and feelings I could relate to. In some regards this expands some of the ideas/feelings expressed in Model/Photographer, in a more intellectual/poetical direction too.

So a mature, imaginative and artistic work, and a welcome contribution to the festival. It's incorporation of betrayel serves as an excellent example i think, of how these festival themes can be incorporated without pursuing turgit, stale unoriginal story themes.

Well done!
 
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Thank you Lawrie for ALL the reviews....you are a gentleman and a scholar...well, at least a scholar!

Cheers :beer:
 
Lawrie,

Thanks for the review. Sorry for the misinterpretation, I fixed my previous post.

And again, thank you for taking the time to do this for everyone.
 
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RoM
RoM explores elements raised in classic science fiction, with the awkward marriage of technology and the human condition and what it means to be either! I have previously been fairly critical of Ben Sliker's lack of intellectual curiousity in his storytelling - ive always applauded the technical skill and craftsmanship of the films, but felt let down at the pop corn theatrics, or jj abrams style soap opera.
Somethings changed...
The keen and effective visual aesthetic is here, but the story, its content and connection resonates with me, and i believe would do so outiside the typical fanboys of a film forum - to mean cranky faced strangers on the street too! I would say this is a well deserved winner for the contest, its daring and looking at uncomfortable issues with far less protective gloss or superficiality.
It looks great - but it also feels great. Well done Ben and the chaps working with him.
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jeez. I almost don't know what to do with myself now. he he. Two thumbs up from Lawrie? Is this some sort of alternate universe or something?

Thanks!!!
 
All of your write-ups seem valid and spot-on, Lawrie. Excellent work as usual. I wish I would have had the time to stop by and offer more opinions. First fest I've missed in a while. I saw most of the films but didn't vote on any since I couldn't make it through them all (for one reason or another).

Anyway, I maintain that we're all lucky to have chaps like Lawrie around to keep our egos grounded by offering well developed and informed critiques. And congrats to the finalists and winners!
 
Aweee thanks Lawsuit_Boy! Yep Ben - two thumbs up!

I know - I missed the chance to offer crits last time, so I rattled these out after I watched the films - so it was quite intuitive feedback really. I see them as art/perspective reviews, though I try to seperate my personal taste some what for critical appraisal for films less to my taste too (blatant entertainment/frat type stuff etc.)

Good to see you around Lawsuit btw! :)
 
For the amount of hard work everyone puts into these fest entries, it's great to see people review them on a whole like Lawrie & Stephen Mick. I *suppose* I'd rather get a bad review than no review at all.

It's a lot of films to watch in a relatively short period of time. Personally, I didn't view them all.

Thanks again.
 
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