FAT MONSTER FILMS presents "O2" ... Every. Breath. Counts.

Your film looked great...

Storywise... Three people on a spaceship with only enough air for two. The third wheel, our Hero, discovers that the other two intend to get rid of him (or so he and WE think). Wow! Great dilemna = Great premise! This should be f*ckn great! What's our Hero gonna do?!

Hero stands around. Beatch walks up to him. Hero seems perturbed, as if thinking, "If you kill me I'll never speak to you again!" Beatch stabs him. Moron, previously known as Hero, falls down. Dead? Who cares... the illusion has been shattered.

Moron wakes up, the rest of the film is fine. Great twist. Great ending.

This could have been better, as I see it, if after setting up your great premise, Hero did something worthwhile, and most importantly relevant to the dilemna. Many choices... my fav, he decides to kill them first! Conflict. Tension. Drama. Hero murders both of them with a wrench! Shocking and savage. We understand his primeval motivation, the survival instinct. What else could he have done?

THEN our blood drenched Hero finds the video message. Realization. Gut wrenching guilt. Cue Twilight Zone them, "Do do do do... "

Just a thought. Fat Monsta Rulz! Foshizzle!

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Just a note that tomorrow we have another DVXUSER visiting Fat Monster. Our on-line friend ZFarms will be arriving and hanging with us this week. We'll be posting some pix and stories here on the thread later this week.

Then this coming weekend one of our VFX mavens (Nate Caauwe) will be arriving for an extended visit. In fact, we're putting Nate to work as an in-house VFX artist for as long as he is here. We can sure use him. Now, if we can get Raptor to leave his cabin in Canada ....
 
Just a note that I HATE KATE's album has been released and they're a featured band on myspace: http://www.myspace.com/ihatekate

They've gotten over a million plays for IT'S ALWAYS BETTER today and our video for the song is slated to debut on MTV sometime in the next couple weeks. We'll post it on our site as soon as it does.
 
Mark Johnson said:
Just a note that I HATE KATE's album has been released and they're a featured band on myspace: http://www.myspace.com/ihatekate

They've gotten over a million plays for IT'S ALWAYS BETTER today and our video for the song is slated to debut on MTV sometime in the next couple weeks. We'll post it on our site as soon as it does.
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I can't wait to see it. The NUDE video ruled, and from what I've seen of Vienna's video.... dddyyyaaammmn.

Keep us posted.
 
wow. wow. wow. i know you guys put in some sleepless nights over this one and every bit of swaet and tear that hit the floor was well worth it. by far the best production value i have seen from users here to date in a fest short. congrats to all youz guys on the theam and that were involved. you have definitely attained that higher level. sincerely guys , my utmost respect, and congratulations on an excellent short.

p.s. ..the tracks in the last shot almost blend right into the floor ;)
 
Just rolled in from a nite with Luis & Eva attending a play in Long Beach. The whole way home we were laughing our asses off at this damn thing that Conrad put up. All I can say is that I think we have the original soundtrack for RPDM around here somewhere too. In fact, I think we may be able to find it tomorrow night.

By the way, today is Tim's birthday.


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Wow... 223 pages.. I don't know whats been said already but I'll just jot down my notes here and hope noone hates me at the end of it.


One the fatal flaws of this piece is the character development. I think biggest mistake was Trevor's character. The main character of the piece should be likable to the audience. He is absolutely not. He was sleeping on the job. He caused the entire crisis. His incompetence hurt another crew member. I can't think of an instance where he was likable at all.

I have to refer to a snippet from a book I read once that used Serpico as an example. At the beginning of the movie, Pacino is running a sting, and he catches a bunch of cons looking to score. One of them shows up late with his kid in tow. Now Pacino could arrest the guy and embarrass him in front of his kid. Instead he says- 'Catch you later.' and flashes his badge. From that point on- we the audience are WITH him no matter where he takes us.

I think thats why the piece as a whole falls flat for me as an audience member is because this guy doesn't deserve squat. Natalia and Sam aren't being played as overtly sinister to misdirect us as a counter-balance to guide the plot to climax. So for me as the audience at the end I'm disappointed because Trevor doesn't deserve this sacrifice and I really wasn't fooled into thinking it was going to play out any other way.

There were other things I could nitpick, especially at the level you guys are operating- like the lack of camera movement, some of the shots were disorienting, etc. But really I think with the production value you did achieve none of that would have mattered if the characters were engaging to begin with.

I do appreciate all the time effort and cost that went into this. Thank you for making it.
 
Slimothy said:
...Got a little nutty last night. But I didn't wake up with urine on my shoes.....

That means I didn't push it quite as much as I would have liked.
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:grin: Have a good one, man!

Mark,

Can't wait to hear the actual audio from RPDM. I am going off to listen to the original sound from O2 right now. :D

EDIT: Wait! I can't find conrad's O2 audio! I was going to listen last night but it was so late I decided to do it today and now it's gone! Somebody help me!
 
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Oh, happy birthday tim! how old are you now? I'll drink to you.... oh wait, I'm already drunk :D Well... I#ll keep on drinking anyway. (germans lost the final in the european soccer championship)
 
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