Facing death (Working title)

Tormod

Tormod

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I have decided to join for the first time. My film script is so far called Facing death.

Logline:
When two men mortally wound eachother in a gunfight duel in the desert and with no help in sight, they must face their fate together as the vultures gather and death creeps closer by the minute.


Will be mostly dialogue. I'm gonna use it to learn to write better dialogue :)
 
I haven`t really seen any westerns, so I`m just writing how i picture it since I don`t know the genre :P
 
Tormod said:
I haven`t really seen any westerns, so I`m just writing how i picture it since I don`t know the genre :P
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Welcome to the fest. Your premise sounds unique and interesting. I'm curious to see how the story plays out.

As for not knowing the western genre, same here. I've not seen very many myself. Looks like I need to rent some. Although after Deadwood and the Sergio Leone masterpieces, how many amazing westerns are there really?
 
Tormod said:
I haven`t really seen any westerns, so I`m just writing how i picture it since I don`t know the genre :P
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I'm the same way, I've seen a few but I'm not big into the genre. And as for writing it's the first time I've done something out of present times. So to get the gist of the dialect I went back and watched some of the classic Eastwood/Sergio Leone films.
 
i love this premise. based on nothing but these preliminary threads, this is the one i'm most looking forward to.
 
Done a pass on the action lines. Now it`s time to brushen up the dialogue. Hope im getting close to final product soon
 
I'm a huge fan of conversationalism! I love it. Granted, DeathProof's 45 min coffee shop scene sucked, I think a great story can be told from just a single room and a conversation. I look forward to this read!!!
 
Thanks for writing and entering.

***SPOILERS***

My biggest question coming out of this script is: Why was The Man motivated to say that he wasn't going to die? During that section of the script I thought that he knew something that the audience and the Sheriff didn't. Like he had an ace up his sleve, or was supernature in nature or something. Instead he ... died. So what was the character thinking to make that proclamation.

It may sound like a small thing, that that's really the catalyst between these two characters and I just didn't understand it.
 
He says he won`t die because he believes that god will somehow save him. then later he realizes that he won`t be saved, but then he hopes for a peaceful death instead

at least that was the idea :P
 
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