Facing death (Working title)
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arroway
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this is the highest concept script of the fest, imo. also the best premise.
it felt very dreamlike. the opening really doesn't make any sense. how did they get there? did they walk? it's all very surreal...and while i think this could work, especially with the right director and soundtrack, i think i personally would have preferred it to be more rooted in reality. that's not a criticism really, just my own preference.
i assume the black carriage is death. that same metaphor is used in a recent western movie called "seraphaim falls" where two guys are out in the desert wounded and intent on killing each other. check it out.
it felt very dreamlike. the opening really doesn't make any sense. how did they get there? did they walk? it's all very surreal...and while i think this could work, especially with the right director and soundtrack, i think i personally would have preferred it to be more rooted in reality. that's not a criticism really, just my own preference.
i assume the black carriage is death. that same metaphor is used in a recent western movie called "seraphaim falls" where two guys are out in the desert wounded and intent on killing each other. check it out.
Sarah Daly
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Great job! Simple story but very powerful. It's an intense, emotional read. The strange relationship between the two men is totally engaging. We really feel their building fear, which comes to a frantic and dark climax with the balck stagecoach.
I really enjoyed this - it's one I'll remember. Thanks!
I really enjoyed this - it's one I'll remember. Thanks!