Death of a Salesman

[Adam J McKay]

Back story: My friend from high school asked me if I would help is little brother out with making a fake trailer for Death of a salesman for his English class. Here it is. We shot this over the course of 3 hours. It was my first attempt at a PMP. Let me know what you think.

 

[Adam J McKay]

Thanks for the feedback.

 

[Adam J McKay]

Again, I am so impressed with all the help we have been getting on here. Great stuff.

 

[j1clark@ucsd.edu]

Thanks for the feedback.

I'm only able to really watch videos on the weekend... and then only comments on ones where I have some thoughts...

In that regard the bigges issue I had with the clip, was that with the letterboxing, to fit into the 16:9 aspect of Youtube, there were 'deep black' bars, relative to the material, which looked like there never was a deep black.

The result was the monochrome looked flatter/lower contrast than I think it should, a couple of shots could have been 'really great' but for the flatness, such as at
00:29, 01:41, and 02:21 (or there abouts...)...

In terms of pacing, I think the car shots could have been chopped a bit. Slow/melancholy is ok, but redundant/overly long breaks the effect for me.

Speaking of the car shot... I don't know, perhaps one from inside the car, perhaps with a dutch angle up from the floorboards for a second round of 'driving'... rather than pretty much the same one...