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Hey everyone! I just registered here on DVXuser. My name's Corey, I wrote the script/am the audio for our group (in case anyone cares hahaha). Yeah, when I heard the prop, I figured I could make a neat little story around it, so I thought up a twilight-y scenario and ran with it. The footage is beautiful (it'll be on here soon. I've seen it while working on the audio), so I hope you all enjoy!
 
Agreed, I am pretty happy with the footage overall. Working on color correction right now in After Effects!
 
Surprisingly effective piece. I wasn’t diggin it, til the hand grabs the ball. I’m not sure if it was the music or what, but it worked out great. Especially the grab at the end.

I’d try to work on your lighting a bit. It came off as very diffused and overly even. The acting was a little stiff too. I know Ben tried his best! Keep it up. Short and sweet piece.
Also, not sure if it was your intend, but having the visitor in the closet be a burly man… creepy pedophile ideas abound! Yuck.
 
Yes, that scene actually got me! And I rarely jump in movies, I just wasn't expecting it. The sound helped as well. :)

Short and to the point.
Yes, the acting wasn't great, but it wasn't bad either.

Nice job.

Mike
 
Michael Anthony Horrigan said:
Yes, that scene actually got me! And I rarely jump in movies
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Yeah! Exactly. I just have to comment on this again. You really pulled off a feat getting a scare at that moment. Especially considering I wasn't to into the film until then. If nothing else, you should consider the flick a success based solely on that.
 
Hey thanks for your comments guys, my team was pretty proud of the shoot, and I do appreciate the lighting and sound comments.

Just to put it in perspective the whole thing was shot in about 10 hours, which was our mistake.

I love criticism and that was the whole reason we entered!:) So thanks again!:dankk2:
 
I have to second the other comments. The ending was really good and had a great payoff. This leaves me with a feeling that I liked this short :)

Good job for a 10 hour shoot!
 
Nice job! That scene with ball made me jump-most of all the films on the fest. I kinda expected it, but really, it got me.
At the beggining when dad's telling his son to go to bed, I think the kid was laughing because of the whole filmmaking thing-maybe I'm wrong, but I think working with kids is really hard, and little Jeff did his job pretty well.

And I like the part when he goes up the stairs and camera moves form left to right-how'd you did that? With cran of sort or some alternative way?

10 hours-we share pretty much the same time used for shooting:D.

Don't miss the next fest, it would be a shame!
 
Mile, that shot looked like it was a dolly.

Correct, HVXOU?

Not a great cast, as it looked like the boy wanted to laugh half the time, but I understand if you didn't have cast, and family, or friends were your last resort. It happens :).

The part at the end was predictable, but it was neat. It looked fast forwarded, and the sound effect really helped!

Thanks for sharing!

Robbie
 
Interesting film. For me, the story was predictable. Acting was..well, inexperienced. I liked most of the camera movements. It had a natural video look..not filmic to me. The video wouldn't playback smoothly for me? Good job on getting a film made and in the fest!
 
Yes it was a dolly, and yeah I was hoping we could have actually had casting, but stupid school got in the way.:violent5:At least it was enjoyable and fun to shoot.
 
ZazaCast said:
Interesting film. For me, the story was predictable. Acting was..well, inexperienced. I liked most of the camera movements. It had a natural video look..not filmic to me. The video wouldn't playback smoothly for me? Good job on getting a film made and in the fest!
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Playback was probably the compression settings, I could not get them to straighten out for me and the film was due. I was also wondering if you had some quick comments on how to make it look a little more filmic.
 
I am not here to beat a dead horse but...Better acting and more of a less predictable ending.
Congratulations on getting it done.
Pauly
 
pauly_the_hitman said:
I am not here to beat a dead horse but...Better acting and more of a less predictable ending.
Congratulations on getting it done.
Pauly
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I agree, thanks for the comments everyone. Tell you friends to comment too, we joined for feedback because this site is awesome!
 
Hey HVXOU, I just checked out your film. Like others have said, the acting wasn't the greatest. I did like the way you cut most of your footage and the ending, though predictable, was just what your film needed and I liked it.

Keep it up!

:beer:
 
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