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Beautiful artwork and shooting. Loved the story skeleton but the whole delusional/mental ward aspect was unnecessary, imo. I'd have rather the two both existed and just drew each other- a love story without the rest. His reaction to her becoming animated was a little over the top. Instead of freaking out and calling 911 he should have been shocked but curious as well and soon calmed down to listen to the voice. This would have made the story harder to cram into the format, granted but would have been far more interesting.
 
Hey thanks for commenting. While I was see where your coming from, the removal of "delusional/mental ward aspect" removes the very conflict that drives the story. Arthur is searching for an answer to the cause of his torment. This, for me, is the epitome of the Twilight Theme and removing it removes the essence of the story.
Were the story to be about star-crossed lovers drawing each other, there would have to be a new element introduced that provided some sort of obstacle that Arthur would need to overcome.
But yeah, thanks for watching and taking the time to comment. I'm glad you liked it!
 
I like the conflict going on... I would certainly not remove that from this film. -- However, I don't think scrapping the mental ward conversation would have hurt you. I can still see him struggling, even checking himself out of a hospital... but the conversation with the doctor felt redundant.

"After all... that's why you checked yourself in here... isn't it?"

Meehhhhh..... of course it is!!!!

Great job on everything else, Mike. This is a much tighter edit. I didn't notice much difference in the Cyborg Assassin office discussion, but I also didn't have a problem with it this time around... so, maybe you changed something... or maybe I just overlooked it. Either way, the fact that it didn't bother me is good!!

I still can't get over that ending. What a POWERFUL moment... probably the most emotional I've gotten in the whole fest. Their focus shifting to each other, and that BRILLIANT dolly move.... wooonderful, Mike. Seriously.

Definite contender for the finals. Keep it up, man.
 
Thanks Kyle, I'm glad you like it so much!

Kyle Stebbins said:
This is a much tighter edit. I didn't notice much difference in the Cyborg Assassin office discussion, but I also didn't have a problem with it this time around... so, maybe you changed something... or maybe I just overlooked it. Either way, the fact that it didn't bother me is good!!
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Perhaps this will jog your memory...

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I can't really say what hasn't been mentioned already. I dug the film. I think it could have done completely without the doctor scene and perhaps swapped with another form of exhibition. (say a convo with a friend in the mundane tasks of the world)

wonderful music. Maybe mixed too loud, but all in all great production and a feel good ending. I was left wanting to see and more of the two artists.

congrats on entering the fest,
/j
 
I thought this was a pretty good film. I too had mixed feelings about the doctor scene... not sure why... something about the way they interacted with each other; it didn't seem real to me. I'm not sure what the ending represents... I think it was all in his head, but I was really keen on the idea of two artists finding themselves in that way. I think I was hoping it was real to the both of them.

Nice work. Thanks for sharing.
 
I really enjoyed this one, the music and the acting were really well done. I wish I would have come on the set with you guys, I feel it would have been a really great experience. Maybe next time! Great work!
 
Thanks for the comments guys. I'm sorry the doctor/patient structure doesn't sit well with you, but it seems like, for the most part, you guys liked it! Thanks again for watching!
 
I didn’t watch all the entries yet, but this is my favourite so far.

I liked how this disturbing tale slowly morphed into a love story.

The scene where the drawings come alive was especially creepy and well done.

I would have liked it better if he met her at the mental ward, finding out she was going nuts just like him.

Nevertheless, it was a pleasure to watch and I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Well done, looking forward to watch more of your films. :)
 
Wow, nice job. One of my favorites of the fest. Beautifully shot, and the moving drawings were fantastic. Great Great Great! My only con would be that there's a little too much talk with the Doc, I think you could've shortened a tad and 5 min would have been plenty. But that's minor. Well done.

cheers,
Jon
 
Hi Mike,

sorry it's taken me so long to get to this... I havent read this thread so I'll just get my first impressions out of the way before I read any of it to clarify what I'm thinking.

first off I liked it, the story had a nice progression and I was drawn in big time. I have to say I was a bit scared because I had two scripts I was going to do for this fest, one was 'broadcast' the other a short about a man writing a novel and one of his charatcers begins to come to life. Thankfully this went in a totally different direction and I was holding my breath all the way through. (because I still want to make that! :))

Anyway... it all worked for me, I love the images moving on the walls - great creepy moment and the fact you managed to turn from that vibe into a love story in a natural way is no small feat in the timescale.

My interpretation of the end was that while he had been drawing this woman all along, she too had the same obsession to draw him, and they of course realise they are meant for each other. So why is he in a mental ward commiting himself? The doc says 'you know she is not real right?' and he replies at the end 'I know'...but I was thinking the opposite, that she was very real and she had the same councilling issues as he did. So I was left a bit confused at the message. Perhaps I have read the wrong thing into the ending; I don't mind an ambiguous ending with questions left unanswered, but these final two scenes seem to contradict each other, which is a shame.

That gripe aside, everything else was top quality and I will now go back and read the rest of the thread to see if I can gleam a bit more info.

Great work Mike.
 
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So why is he in a mental ward commiting himself? The doc says 'you know she is not real right?' and he replies at the end 'I know'...but I was thinking the opposite, that she was very real and she had the same councilling issues as he did.
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I think you missed the subtle acting there when he says, "I know". For me, it seemed like he's going to look into the camera and give us a wink at any second. :thumbsup:
That would've been cheesy, but the feeling that he's not telling the truth came across for me.
 
yeehaanow said:
I think you missed the subtle acting there when he says, "I know". For me, it seemed like he's going to look into the camera and give us a wink at any second. :thumbsup:
That would've been cheesy, but the feeling that he's not telling the truth came across for me.
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YES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Sebastian's pretty good, isn't he? Hehe...
 
Nice work blindbuzta! I enjoyed the concept and story on this one, as well as the acting. It was compelling and moved at a good pace. I have to agree with yeehaanow that the acting and storytelling is done in a very subtle way, which works well. Oh, and great artwork! Good job man.
 
Sorry we missed the screening :( I flew into LA from Milwaukee in the morning and was exhausted. Loooong weekend. Slept through the rest of the day. Very sorry!
 
It was awesome! We had a packed house.. the gallery was filled to capacity! I'll post pictures soon..

majikfraug said:
Sorry we missed the screening :( I flew into LA from Milwaukee in the morning and was exhausted. Loooong weekend. Slept through the rest of the day. Very sorry!
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No worries.. sorry you couldn't come! I definitely empathize, I've had about 5 hours of sleep total in the last 2 days... i could use a day to sleep...haha!
 
I like it a lot. The tone you got for this film was very interesting and all the elements worked together in maintaining it which is a challenge. The artwork and story both were very good, I admit I wasn't completely satisfied by the ending as I was really thinking the girl would be real in some capacity. If she would've been introduced at the beginning as a real person then adding the twist at the end would've helped, but revealing who she is near the end, and then almost immediately afterwords saying she's not didn't feel right.

Hard to make it work in such a short timeframe, but you did an excellent job with the time that you had to work with here.
 
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