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Aaron Marshall
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This is one of my personal favorites so far in the fest. The only thing that got me like mrpunch said, was the TV. Not so much the TV, or how it was executed, but what was going on within that reality. A cop wouldn't openly admit that these bullets just fell in an unexplainable fashion.
#1: He'd get made fun of all over the force for such a claim. "Oh look it's Spooky Mulder"
#2: Ego; he'd just collect the bullets and claim he captured the criminal. It would boost his career.
It's possible it could go down like how it was portrayed, but those 2 things up above kept eating at me.
This is just a small gripe in an otherwise great film. I like the bullet extraction from the arm. That was very well done.
#1: He'd get made fun of all over the force for such a claim. "Oh look it's Spooky Mulder"
#2: Ego; he'd just collect the bullets and claim he captured the criminal. It would boost his career.
It's possible it could go down like how it was portrayed, but those 2 things up above kept eating at me.
This is just a small gripe in an otherwise great film. I like the bullet extraction from the arm. That was very well done.
snodart
Veteran
Very nice. Has the feel of an extended trailer, which works for this contest. Great story/title idea. Great shots. Nice work on making the news footage on the TV. Bullet extraction = great. The drip of blood at start is perfect. Same as stated already though, the cop's lines aren't believable. Great lighting, shot comp, titles, score, voice over, .... I also liked what was said in the voice over - felt real.
Nice work! Looks like the skills and tools are there for other great work.
Nice work! Looks like the skills and tools are there for other great work.
Thanks guys! I appreciate all the good feedback.
We had the same feelings about the news footage, but it was one of those things we just didn't have time to reshoot. It started raining, and that was all we had.
As far as the bullet extraction — Thanks! That was a lot of hard work, but a lot of fun also. I can explain more after voting - I just don't know the rules and what we're allowed and not allowed to talk about.
We had the same feelings about the news footage, but it was one of those things we just didn't have time to reshoot. It started raining, and that was all we had.
As far as the bullet extraction — Thanks! That was a lot of hard work, but a lot of fun also. I can explain more after voting - I just don't know the rules and what we're allowed and not allowed to talk about.
Anthem78
Active member
thanks for the great feedback everyone.
I don't know how much I'm allowed to get into, but it was shot on the DVX100B, edited and color corrected in Final Cut Pro. All color correction was done in post - we tried to just capture the best image we could on set.
Titles and effects (bullets stopping, etc.) were done in After Effects.
Lighting setup was mainly an Arri 1000W Fresnel with a softbox and an Arri 300W Fresnel.
I'll post some stills (CC, detailed effects stuff) after I find out what I can and cannot say before the voting.
I don't know how much I'm allowed to get into, but it was shot on the DVX100B, edited and color corrected in Final Cut Pro. All color correction was done in post - we tried to just capture the best image we could on set.
Titles and effects (bullets stopping, etc.) were done in After Effects.
Lighting setup was mainly an Arri 1000W Fresnel with a softbox and an Arri 300W Fresnel.
I'll post some stills (CC, detailed effects stuff) after I find out what I can and cannot say before the voting.
Beat Takeshi
Two-Hip Shakur
I loved the look of this. 35mm adapter?
That opening wide shot was really sweet and the edits bringing the girl into the shot was cool. I wanted some atmosphere though there. Some nice volumetric lights beaming past him to the spot where she lay.
The last shot was really nice with the eye.
That opening wide shot was really sweet and the edits bringing the girl into the shot was cool. I wanted some atmosphere though there. Some nice volumetric lights beaming past him to the spot where she lay.
The last shot was really nice with the eye.
mjmcneese
Veteran
I just watched this again, and I must say that your talent with lighting and composing a shot shine through in this piece. None of the angles were boring or cliche.
I'm gonna get really picky, though...the shot with him on the chair, his eyes are barely in frame, I wasn't sure if what you wanted the viewer to be looking that there...his eyes, his arm? The over-the-head shot from the fridge...was that a little grainy? And, like has been said, this leaves me wanting...but maybe it leaves out too much. Yeah, it's 5:00, but I would like do have seen your talents shine through with a more apparent plot/conflict.
Seriously, though, I'm being picky. You are showing some talent and potential and my comments are more of a challenge than anything else. This one is a standout in my book.
I'm gonna get really picky, though...the shot with him on the chair, his eyes are barely in frame, I wasn't sure if what you wanted the viewer to be looking that there...his eyes, his arm? The over-the-head shot from the fridge...was that a little grainy? And, like has been said, this leaves me wanting...but maybe it leaves out too much. Yeah, it's 5:00, but I would like do have seen your talents shine through with a more apparent plot/conflict.
Seriously, though, I'm being picky. You are showing some talent and potential and my comments are more of a challenge than anything else. This one is a standout in my book.
We really appreciate that. We worked super hard on this and it's nice to know it paid off. And I don't mind you being picky, that's what we're here for.
To answer your questions:
The chair shot/eyes in frame: good call. our focus was more on the arm and the action of slowly rolling up that sleeve, even the look on his face - but more the seriousness in the mouth - not so much the eyes. But that's a good comment, and something to remember.
The fridge shot may have been a TOUCH grainy - but I know compression hurt that a bit also. We shot that only with some spill light coming from another room, and of course the original refrigerator light. Anything else was too bright or "lit", and we needed it dark and moody, even if that meant just a bit of grain.
As far as it leaving you wanting: I guess that's the point. We wrote this and edited it to the original 5 minute mark before there was a 6 minute option. And it was important to us to have good intros and credits. Maybe there is more we could have done...
And trust me, we're totally picky on ourselves too. There were more shots that we dropped because they didn't add anything or maybe were not as well-composed. I really appreciate your pickyness —*it makes us all better.
Lighting is one of our favorite parts of filming, and we feel like we always need to improve. It means a lot to us that you really like the lighting and composition.
Again, thanks. I REALLY appreciate those comments.
To answer your questions:
The chair shot/eyes in frame: good call. our focus was more on the arm and the action of slowly rolling up that sleeve, even the look on his face - but more the seriousness in the mouth - not so much the eyes. But that's a good comment, and something to remember.
The fridge shot may have been a TOUCH grainy - but I know compression hurt that a bit also. We shot that only with some spill light coming from another room, and of course the original refrigerator light. Anything else was too bright or "lit", and we needed it dark and moody, even if that meant just a bit of grain.
As far as it leaving you wanting: I guess that's the point. We wrote this and edited it to the original 5 minute mark before there was a 6 minute option. And it was important to us to have good intros and credits. Maybe there is more we could have done...
And trust me, we're totally picky on ourselves too. There were more shots that we dropped because they didn't add anything or maybe were not as well-composed. I really appreciate your pickyness —*it makes us all better.
Lighting is one of our favorite parts of filming, and we feel like we always need to improve. It means a lot to us that you really like the lighting and composition.
Again, thanks. I REALLY appreciate those comments.
Anthem78
Active member
No doubt. We can only get better.
I noticed the grain in post on the over the fridge shot, and I'm not sure where it's coming from. I didn't adjust the gain in-camera, so maybe it came in post from bumping up the whites.
And yes, the adapter was from Chris "twocik23". I've been really happy with it so far. We used a variety of lenses (50/1.4, 50mm macro, and a 135mm). I would have liked another lens, but the money was already being stretched.
I noticed the grain in post on the over the fridge shot, and I'm not sure where it's coming from. I didn't adjust the gain in-camera, so maybe it came in post from bumping up the whites.
And yes, the adapter was from Chris "twocik23". I've been really happy with it so far. We used a variety of lenses (50/1.4, 50mm macro, and a 135mm). I would have liked another lens, but the money was already being stretched.
conrad_johnson
Well-known member
The FBI profiles was an interesting way of telling the story in the beginning - I liked it.
The shot of the bullet being pulled from the arm was a bit too long. It was just over the bordeline between being just long enough to make the viewer feel uncomfortable, and making it apparent that you're TRYING to make the viewer feel uncomfortable.
The voiceover kind of sounded like it was recorded in a shoebox.
Cinematography and lighting were excellent. Last shot was great.
Story kind of lost me in the end - can you clarify what it meant by revenge being expensive? Is he saving up the FBI's reward money to buy guns and bombs and stuff to go after the people who killed his family? Or is he saving up the FBI's reward money to buy a bunch of bangin' escalades and roleys to make the FBI jealous? That was lost on me.
Good work!
The shot of the bullet being pulled from the arm was a bit too long. It was just over the bordeline between being just long enough to make the viewer feel uncomfortable, and making it apparent that you're TRYING to make the viewer feel uncomfortable.
The voiceover kind of sounded like it was recorded in a shoebox.
Cinematography and lighting were excellent. Last shot was great.
Story kind of lost me in the end - can you clarify what it meant by revenge being expensive? Is he saving up the FBI's reward money to buy guns and bombs and stuff to go after the people who killed his family? Or is he saving up the FBI's reward money to buy a bunch of bangin' escalades and roleys to make the FBI jealous? That was lost on me.
Good work!
The hard part about the arm shot is that we basically had one take. So to get the drip and then to get the bullet out made the shot a bit too long. Maybe there is something we can do later to shorten that part, but basically it would be to lose the initial drip.
We were running out of time to make the original deadline, and I just couldn't get the voiceover right. I was getting over a cold and recorded the latest I could, but it was still not ideal.
Thank you on cinematography and lighting. And FBI shots.
As far as the money, that is being used to buy guns and bombs and stuff to go after the people who killed his family. See, you got it. That is why we showed the plans and spy shots of the people and his area where he was working on his revenge plans. We were going to have more plans, and a model of an armored vehicle that he was building — but again, there was a deadline to meet!
Thank you though, it was fun and we hope you liked it.
We were running out of time to make the original deadline, and I just couldn't get the voiceover right. I was getting over a cold and recorded the latest I could, but it was still not ideal.
Thank you on cinematography and lighting. And FBI shots.
As far as the money, that is being used to buy guns and bombs and stuff to go after the people who killed his family. See, you got it. That is why we showed the plans and spy shots of the people and his area where he was working on his revenge plans. We were going to have more plans, and a model of an armored vehicle that he was building — but again, there was a deadline to meet!
Thank you though, it was fun and we hope you liked it.
Edgen
Veteran
Well, not much I can really say without sounding like a record.
So, i'll say it anyway.
here's my stuff in short:
I dug the shots/angles.
dramatic angles were nice.
I'm glad the phone didn't ring.
The Bullet wound was crazy! just too damn long. If he's super and not pain, he'd rip it out.
The guy on the TV. eh.. I'm not sure I believed his performance.
Music.. I think was appropriate. The Rock elements worked well. cheers. The orchestral stuff was very effective in the montage.
REally dug the sfx for the montage.
I got the story and understood why the character wanted to stay anonymous. I kind wish you had one key villain though that you were going after. The montage didn't tell too much. Terrorists?
FX and bullets. Nice touch. Framing for that shot. I dig it.
Lighting. The 'most wanted' looked like they were being interviewed for a reality show set in a dark creepy mansion with a butler as the killer. I would have liked to perhaps seen their faces interweaved throughout the first half. That would have chopped up your bullet hole plucking.
Anyway, I really enjoyed the film. You guys know your stuff.
cheers!
/j
So, i'll say it anyway.
here's my stuff in short:
I dug the shots/angles.
dramatic angles were nice.
I'm glad the phone didn't ring.
The Bullet wound was crazy! just too damn long. If he's super and not pain, he'd rip it out.
The guy on the TV. eh.. I'm not sure I believed his performance.
Music.. I think was appropriate. The Rock elements worked well. cheers. The orchestral stuff was very effective in the montage.
REally dug the sfx for the montage.
I got the story and understood why the character wanted to stay anonymous. I kind wish you had one key villain though that you were going after. The montage didn't tell too much. Terrorists?
FX and bullets. Nice touch. Framing for that shot. I dig it.
Lighting. The 'most wanted' looked like they were being interviewed for a reality show set in a dark creepy mansion with a butler as the killer. I would have liked to perhaps seen their faces interweaved throughout the first half. That would have chopped up your bullet hole plucking.
Anyway, I really enjoyed the film. You guys know your stuff.
cheers!
/j
what a great looking and styisticly sophisticated piece.
the ilghting and composition in those early shots was extremely well done including the title appearence.
I have some of the same dings as mentioned above, but they've already been said.
Looked great and I dug the concept!
- Jack
the ilghting and composition in those early shots was extremely well done including the title appearence.
I have some of the same dings as mentioned above, but they've already been said.
Looked great and I dug the concept!
- Jack