snodart
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Thanks for the new input guys.
dangal, to be honest with you, I read your first post and then decide to ignore it. I did this mainly because it lacked tact and common respect, and because it seemed to fall pretty far outside of the other feedback that we have received (both positive and negative).
That being said, I think your second response was a little more clearly stated and thought provoking.
As to the actor who played the teacher. I see your point, but respectfully disagree.
The egg. Everyone who posted a comment thus far understood that it was an egg. If you missed that it was an egg... well that makes about one in a hundred or so responses. I can live with that.
At any rate, I do appreciate you taking the time to post and giving us your thoughts.
dangal, to be honest with you, I read your first post and then decide to ignore it. I did this mainly because it lacked tact and common respect, and because it seemed to fall pretty far outside of the other feedback that we have received (both positive and negative).
That being said, I think your second response was a little more clearly stated and thought provoking.
As to the actor who played the teacher. I see your point, but respectfully disagree.
The egg. Everyone who posted a comment thus far understood that it was an egg. If you missed that it was an egg... well that makes about one in a hundred or so responses. I can live with that.
Maybe you missed it in your second viewing, but the boy does actually look up about 9 seconds into it. We thought about showing that the object was an egg at this point, but decided that it would be nice to let the viewer wonder what it was until the point when the boy pulls it out to inspect it at the desk.dangal said:also I would have understood that it was an egg if
1. He would have looked up to see if he can see a nest.
I agree with you 100% here, and I believe it was mentioned in a couple of other posts as well. We did try to keep the framing pretty tight for most shots, but now haveing watched it several times after the fest, I wish we would have utilized some head room in many of the shots. A good lesson learned for us.dangal said:also one problem with the cinematography. heads are being cut out all the time, kinda bothered me
At any rate, I do appreciate you taking the time to post and giving us your thoughts.
deputy_dog, thanks for the comments. When we wrote the story we wanted it to feel more like a short story than a short film. I think that most short stories have that quality of being a part of something bigger. One of the reasons that I appreciate short stories is that they often seem to only tell some of the story or just a random segment in time. It seems that this allows the reader to fill in the rest of the pieces and to apply the story more easily to their own experiences (since the background of the story is less specific). Anyway, I'm not sure if doing this hurt the overall impact of our short or not, but that was our thought process.deputy_dog said:The story as a whole seemed to work for me, but it felt more like a 6 minute part of a larger movie.