Thanks! I really appreciate you taking a look at it.
I'm agonizing a little over the useless ambiguity of the whole thing. The concept wasn't mine; I was hired to do the spec by a micro-managing wannabe-creative. Not an excuse, just an explanation. I could certainly have done better with the first shot or two, and it would have made a world of difference.
Hind-sight is 20/20. Now the question of whether or not I should put it on my reel...
If you can't add any shots I would definitely just get rid of the first shot all together. Then your first shot is the guy bursting out of the back door which is a much stronger shot. Any ambiguity is then purposeful instead of accidental. And to be honest it would be less ambiguous anyway. A guy running out of a back door naked? you can pretty much guess what happened. The fact that his pal is a woman just makes him less creepy. You can analyse things to death, but many adverts are arbitrary anyway. As far as they go this probably makes more sense than most. Take other members hints on grading as well, and it will be looking good. One thing I should say though: Im not sure about american slang, but to my british ears, "Back Door Man" sounds like a porn film. Maybe "levi spec ad" or similar might be a better title.
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