A commercial we shot for fun for our JiuJitsu gym.

I think it's "so-so". Some good shots, and some not-so-good shots. There were some wides that had too much headroom, and lots of shots looking down on people. Looking down is not always the best perspective for the viewer, especially if you're wanting to make the subject look important.

The hand-held work was too shaky. Get a tripod, get a shoulder support (with proper counterweight), and use them. Pacing was okay (for something like this it should be cut a little more upbeat), music choice was good.

The opening shot was far too long (and the audio was of poor quality). The shaky hand-held work coupled with walking introduced some serious rolling shutter artifacts. And the graphic at :45 was also too long (Motion particle genereators?).

Also, there's a spelling error in the credits: "Additional Footge by" should be "Additional Footage by".
 
Alex H. said:
I think it's "so-so". Some good shots, and some not-so-good shots. There were some wides that had too much headroom, and lots of shots looking down on people. Looking down is not always the best perspective for the viewer, especially if you're wanting to make the subject look important.

The hand-held work was too shaky. Get a tripod, get a shoulder support (with proper counterweight), and use them. Pacing was okay (for something like this it should be cut a little more upbeat), music choice was good.

The opening shot was far too long (and the audio was of poor quality). The shaky hand-held work coupled with walking introduced some serious rolling shutter artifacts. And the graphic at :45 was also too long (Motion particle genereators?).

Also, there's a spelling error in the credits: "Additional Footge by" should be "Additional Footage by".
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Thanks mate! One of the things too that the grade of color in each is poor(due to poor lighting in the gym).
 
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