OTHER: Webseries: CLUTCH - a femme fatale Rated R series I directed

Episode 2 is set for June 30 release! Episode 3 and 4 in the month to follow... but then.... we'd really appreciate even a $1 contribution via indiegogo.com where episode 1 is playing. Every dollar really does help us make this baby.
 
And where is the character people need to identify with ? I think you forgot most important thing when you wrote this.I dont care about this story at all and i actually wish all of them the worst.Thats the hard truth and im sure im not the only one.
 
This is still looking pretty interesting. A few things to fix from what I saw in episode 2 would be sound and reaction. The sound of the axe thrown across the room for 1. It's a really good shot, but doesn't have the umph, because it doesn't have the sound of the throw (the whoosh-whoosh sound of the axe spinning in the air) and it doesn't have the impact sound of the axe hitting the wall. Those are very important and should be impactful enough for the audience to feel it. The other thing I noticed was the main bad guy's reaction to getting shot. That should probably be cut alot shorter. He seemed to be waiting to get shot and then reacted. You should probably cut to him already in the motion of getting shot, because you show her firing, so the next shot we see should be him getting hit, not about to get hit. Other than that I thought it all flowed together pretty well. It's looking good.
 
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