SHORT: VISIONS of VENICE

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ivan friedman

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Hello all,


This is my first post. I've been following this forum for quite some time now and always learn something new. As to introduce myself and my work, I'd like to share this litle piece I shot in Venice durring my last visit last may.
I am always eager to receive constructive critic on my work so do not hesitate to comment or share your impressions, it will be much appreciated. This is a short format film without a real structure.. Here the atmosphere, the "musicality" of the images, the rhythm, the shapes and the light are the most important.
It was shot One man crew, on Dragon with Lovely LEICA-R Lenses. And just tripod, slider but mostly hand held..


Thanks for watching :-)

https://vimeo.com/129346620



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Nice. Good stuff. One thought, though... about that slo-mo... everyone, and I mean EVERYONE uses - and overuses it - to the point that it's become a painful cliche; true artistry means using new and interesting ways to accomplish the same aims - why be like everyone else? That is not the way to stand out from the crowd. Think of what the slo-mo accomplishes artistically and emotionally, and dig deep within your talent and see if you can accomplish the same artistic and emotional impact that slo-mo gave you, but using different tools. As is, like I said, it's nice. But is "nice" enough in this world, for those who want to stand out? The use of slo-mo is an example of not reaching high enough to make it more than "nice" and "good stuff". It's a cliche, and you used it - not as badly as most, but you still used it. And that's why it's only "nice", not "fantastic!!!". Remember, when people are looking at footage, what they are really looking for is not just something "nice" - they are looking for the unicorn, for that one-in-a-million, the one that STANDS OUT. Ask yourself if it stands out - honestly. If it's the kind of thing that will make people pick up the phone and want to contact you, not just briefly comment on a website - the test is very easy... is your phone ringing right now, with a producer at the other end, who saw this, and then another call from another producer, and another? No? That's an objective test. Right now.

I give you this thought - and have taken the time to write this out - because I think you have promise and a good eye and a good feeling for images and sequences. But I think you need to challenge yourself more. Aim higher. You'll be better for it. Best of luck!
 
OldCorpse,

Thank you for the honest critic. I like what you said.. its true, of course. Slow Mo is there for a variety of reasons..many of them aren't good reasons, even though some of them may be good in this particular piece. That doesn't change the fact that its a cliché yes... and overused. So if you tell me go out and look for different ways to achieve the same emotional charge.. that sounds good to me.

thanks again. i'll surely keep a good eye on that one.

Cheers, Ivan



OldCorpse said:
Nice. Good stuff. One thought, though... about that slo-mo... everyone, and I mean EVERYONE uses - and overuses it - to the point that it's become a painful cliche; true artistry means using new and interesting ways to accomplish the same aims - why be like everyone else? That is not the way to stand out from the crowd. Think of what the slo-mo accomplishes artistically and emotionally, and dig deep within your talent and see if you can accomplish the same artistic and emotional impact that slo-mo gave you, but using different tools. As is, like I said, it's nice. But is "nice" enough in this world, for those who want to stand out? The use of slo-mo is an example of not reaching high enough to make it more than "nice" and "good stuff". It's a cliche, and you used it - not as badly as most, but you still used it. And that's why it's only "nice", not "fantastic!!!". Remember, when people are looking at footage, what they are really looking for is not just something "nice" - they are looking for the unicorn, for that one-in-a-million, the one that STANDS OUT. Ask yourself if it stands out - honestly. If it's the kind of thing that will make people pick up the phone and want to contact you, not just briefly comment on a website - the test is very easy... is your phone ringing right now, with a producer at the other end, who saw this, and then another call from another producer, and another? No? That's an objective test. Right now.

I give you this thought - and have taken the time to write this out - because I think you have promise and a good eye and a good feeling for images and sequences. But I think you need to challenge yourself more. Aim higher. You'll be better for it. Best of luck!
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