Too Funny

They stole the opening music from the opening of "To Kill A Mockingbird."
I didn't think it was all that great, but it was pretty good.
 
Interesting. And this is posted in the Screenplay/Writing forum because...?

Perhaps the Cafe would have been the correct place to post it. :thumbsup:
 
Zak Forsman said:
yeah, that kind of bummed me out when i posted the Heart of Now script. No one read it. See you guys in the Café!!!
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I Remember that script and I remember commenting on it--and as I recall there was an offer to post pages together with a produced scene for analysis.

Post anything here that hasn't been produced and I'd be happy to read it--and don't think I'd ever consider any of the pointed comments directed my way in the mix--that'd be so lame.

Reading and commenting on scripts is one of the only ways I can put something back in to this community. And if I help enough people they might even remove the prison anklet.
 
brianluce said:
It's hateful, exploitive, garbabe.

With all the stuff on the net I can't believe this is what comes here.
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Yeah I thought it was great too. :)

Sick.
Twisted.
Well "executed" (pun intended, but seriously nice dialogue and acting)

excellent

though I confess, I did other things while watching ... it was kind of slow, then once it showed it's hand, so to speak, it didn't have anywhere else to really go. But I loved the concept, acting, and dialogue especially.


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Jack Daniel Stanley said:
Yeah I thought it was great too. :)

Sick.
Twisted.
Well "executed" (pun intended, but seriously nice dialogue and acting)

excellent

though I confess, I did other things while watching ... it was kind of slow, then once it showed it's hand, so to speak, it didn't have anywhere else to really go. But I loved the concept, acting, and dialogue especially.


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Ditto here, Jack - shockingly novel idea but entirely predictable and soon tedious if based solely on the concept. Even though the context of the dialog/acting kept the shortie interesting, IMHO the camera work was critical to captivate the viewer's attention. I do give the writer credit for the situations like the running cat scene - certainly unexpected and adding another dimension of interest. Also, the treatment of the late arrival helped keep things moving. But I'll bet each of us could make improvements by developing a backstory and closing with a surprising bit of irony. As it is, the short will appeal to a limited audience.

Regards, Michael
 
brianluce said:
Because if the script was posted most likely no one would comment on it.
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Judging the script based on the executed film can be fraught with problems. How much improv went on? Do you credit this to the writer? Was the story poorly executed or edited? Does the blame fall on the writer (screenplay)? Perhaps, perhaps not. The only REAL way to judge the writing, is to SEE the writing. What ends up on the screen is just a representation of the screenplay and may or may not be a fair representation.
 
Excellent points, Blaine.

The finished product is a representation of all who participated. It may have been a crappy script, saved by a great director, and great acting. Or, the script may have been superior to what we see, but had to be scaled back due to budget concerns.

All that aside, it is original and entertaining, though i agree, slow to start.

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alex whitmer said:
Excellent points, Blaine.

The finished product is a representation of all who participated. It may have been a crappy script, saved by a great director, and great acting. Or, the script may have been superior to what we see, but had to be scaled back due to budget concerns.



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If the point here is that great directors can make good movies from crappy scripts, then I disagree, fundamentally--unless of course the director radically changes the script, but then He wouldn't be making a movie from a crappy script.
 
Blaine said:
Judging the script based on the executed film can be fraught with problems. How much improv went on? Do you credit this to the writer? Was the story poorly executed or edited? Does the blame fall on the writer (screenplay)? Perhaps, perhaps not. The only REAL way to judge the writing, is to SEE the writing. What ends up on the screen is just a representation of the screenplay and may or may not be a fair representation.
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Not sure what the point here is-- I'm confused, by "SEEING" the writing do you mean SEEING the movie or READING the script? but if you see the movie and read the script, then there shouldn't be any problem deciding how much improv went on.
 
he's not talking about seeing and reading. he's talking about seeing the finished film only and evaluating the screenplay from that,
which is fraught with problems if that's your sole method of evaluating the screenplay, because, as he stated, and fairly clearly to me at least, how in the name of Christmas do you have any idea where what you're SEEING on the screen came from ... rote interpretation of the script? improv? director's uncredited rewrite, on set rewrite ... etc.
 
It was pretty interesting. My only gripe is that it was like they had all been playing it for years, they were so casual about it. Maybe if just one person lost each Sunday I could believe that.

But I digress... :)

I liked it overall.

Mike
 
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