Think Happy Thoughts

[MrKilloran]

I don't know if this was intentional, but the description of a "plain white room" led me to think something very clean and sterile, which is an odd juxtaposition with the decaying hallway with the foul liquid that requires the SWAT team to wear hazmat suits.

Completely intentional.

I don't really get Luke's record player and how its music caused Jeff's mind to wander.

Yeah, this was an idea that sounded cool but practically doesn't make much sense. The music I saw as an tool to allow for creative, imaginative thinking, something the party frowns upon.

At the same time Luke merely using the music and proclaiming is "love" for it, shows the perks of being higher up in the party. Back to the drawing board to figure out how to make it work or improve on it.

 

[kennethhurd]

Thanks, I thought it was kind of terrifying too. I had an idea for an opening shot of groups of people - some with the "device" and others without and then one's head just explodes but the rest of the people just continue on, ignoring the carnage, out of fear.

I think that would be an excellent way to open the script. There's definitely a lot that you can do with this concept.