"The Morning After" A sexy new horror film by Jeremy Poindexter

thanks for checking out the movie. it's nice to see that people who aren't in the contest are watching these films.

hvxabuser said:
cool concept and story. use lighting more and you got something.
care to elaborate?
 
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well done.
i was in chemistry class with you.
and now here we are.
short looks good.
 
One more thing, you tout this as the sexy new horror film. Are you bringing sexy back to horror? And if so, doesn't that kind of make you the Justin Timberlake of DVXUser?

Just a thought.
 
I feel dirty doing this, but it seems like the in thing to do.

On Friday the 13th at 9pm (PST) I will hold a drawing for a $100 gift certificate. The winner will choose the store - Amazon, B&H, iTunes, whatever you want.

There are two different ways to get into the drawing.

1) The hard way: Find the hidden message in "The Morning After" and PM the answer to me. (Warning: it is very tough to spot)

OR

2) The easy way: Watch "The Morning After" and write a thoughtful, detailed review. If you think it sucks, tell me why... If you thought it was good, tell me why... If you don't get it, tell me what you would do to make it better... etc.

You can do either one of these things to get into the drawing. If you do both, you'll be entered into the drawing twice.

Good Luck.
 
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THIS SHORT FILM ROCKS. AND SO AS NOT TO SPOIL IT FOR YA, I HAVE TO WARN YOU NOT TO READ THIS BEFORE SEEING THE MORNING AFTER YOURSELF!

So it's 1 am and I'm trying to cram the last of the Horrorfest films in before bed. I literally had two films left: The Morning After and Stricken. Stricken's not in competition apparently. And I hadn't come across any buzz about The Morning After. I thought I had picked my favourites. Which were Halfway, The Girl Next Door and Crawlspace. But one of 'em just got bumped out of my top three by The Morning After. I simply loved this short film. I thought, finally, a horror film with something to say. I was totally convinced by the filmmakers' use of subtle details to convey the typical "morning after" from a big party as experienced by the typical early-twenties-something girl. And the innocence of the phone messages continued to heighten my curiosity and dread. Surely Bobby is bad. Surely he's coming back. Oh God, that means I'm probably going to see another short film about a girl getting stabbed. I'd estimate there are probably 30 such films in this Horrorfest. I want something different. And then surprise, finally, The Morning After gave it to me in spades. The camera work and colors are artfully controlled. It's simple and so innocuous in its slow build. The reveal is exactly what I want from a well told story. And frankly, my biggest complaint about all the shorts in Horrorfest (and the other dvxuser fests) has been weak, poorly written stories. This is an expertly written story. With subtext and craft no less. Music and performances were absolutely pitch-perfect.

Okay, what didn't I like? As much as I praise the writing (the phone messages were flawless) and the wonderfully twisted twist ending...there is one thing vaguely unclear to me. And that is something that stems from the shot when we first see blood on her fingertips and then blood on the back of her legs. My first thought is rape, of course. That's what the filmmaker intends, I presume. And it's a hauntingly realistic presumption. We've heard the stories--this has happened to girls at colleges everywhere. Certainly, the answering maching messages reinforce this conclusion. Then the arm coming up over the bed--unsettling and perfectly freaky. The filmmaker has masterfully got us where he wants us. I'm thinkin', girl, RUN! But then when our lovely heroine commits her final act, I find I am left with two possible interpretations of the ending: 1) that the blood on her legs was Bobby's blood...meaning she hadn't finished the job she started last night--and this is the ending I believe the filmmaker intends, because it's smart and so far the whole film is smart; but it could, possibly, also be 2) the blood on her legs is her blood, from a rape, and simply in retaliation she's killing the drunk dude. I don't think it's #2. I hope it's not. It's way more down-the-middle ordinary. But there's just that shred of doubt in my mind. And so the only thing I could think to totally clarify and deliver the intended #1 ending is when she first gets out of bed and takes off her shoes, I wish one was missing...she only had one on...and doesn't think much of it yet...and then when she returns to the bed and dials the phone and the arm comes up and over, she sees it...then finds the other shoe under the bed...the heel is broken...it's bloody...she puts them both on anyway (presumably to run? we're not sure...it's strange and I like it), then she goes around the side of the bed and...well you know the rest. It would simply tell me that she's finishing the job she started. At the very least, if she was wearing both heels to bed, one might be broken (I realize revealing some blood on it too early might screw with the careful unraveling of the story).

So that's it. This is a filmmaker I'd trust to deliver a story on a bigger scale. It's hard to say that about many. A lot of the short films here looked amazing, but didn't deliver a story that stood up nor performances I believed. And so here's the film that's got it all. Close call between The Morning After and Halfway for me for top film of the fest!

I bet only the filmmaker read this far. But anyone else who did GO WATCH MORNING AFTER NOW!
 
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Overall I thought this short was good. For me it's well enough lit, well composed, and I had no gripes with the audio. I was fooled into thinking she didn't know the guy was there. Even after his hand came up and she didn't react, I thought it was just delayed due to shock.

I will try to list the issues I had in order.

(phone message) If she had gone home with the guy, why would he be calling her cell? Why would her friend think that?

There is a close up scene while the girl is looking in the mirror that is too blown out in the background. Other than that though, all the shots looked really good to me.

The blood on her legs and on the bed looks fake, especially considering that it's been there all night. It would be more crusty and brown by now. Even if not brown, a deeper red would have been nice. The blood we see is kind of orange and still looks wet.

The first time watching this short I just figured she attacked him but didn't quite kill him the night before. However, watching it again, I'm wondering if they just had sex and he took her long guarded virginity. There are three things that lead me to at least suspect this.
1. The blood is kind of between her legs, and there wasn't that much of it. However this could have also been menstrual blood. But if that was the case, I can't think of why it would be in the short. Also, as before mentioned, it could have been evidence of rape. But I don't think so. I don't think rape automatically means blood. If it was supposed to have been rape, I think we would see some ripped clothes, bruises, or a black eye or something.
2. The way the guy reaches his arm up over the bed and clears his throat a bit, just seems like a guy who went to sleep on the floor or fell off the bed in the middle of the night but was too drunk to care. It doesn't seem like he is someone who is dying. Now I'm really not sure which way you intended it. Either way, I think it could have been a bit more clear. It's tough since we don't get to see a lot of what's going on in this girls head through her facial expressions.
3. If she had already tried to kill the guy the night before, why would she be calling someone after seeing the blood? Also her nervous shaking while the phone rang suggested to me that she was not sinister, and genuinely concerned needing to talk to someone. Then again maybe it's just a bit of a red herring. It could also be interpreted differently I'm sure.

Anyway that's my take. Despite any issues, I still enjoyed this short. I looked for the secrete message a bit, but to no avail.
 
Hey luster, congratulations on your film. You know you have a fan here!

I really liked what you did, as I've said.

Best of luck to you! This has been a blast!

Ted
 
REVIEW:

First of all, I liked the title, it worked for the short. The title should have something
to do with the story and this was spot on. Using the answering machine instead
of voice over, outstanding. I am not a fan of the voice over, but this was thinking
outside of the box and was a clever way of telling us withing being
inside her head.

When it was stated, "I hope you didn't go home with him" I would have liked
a close-up of her eyes, that realization of - oops, did I? The shot you have now
I don't think was as dramatic as it could have been. Sleeping in her freakin' high heel shoes, now that just cracked me to no end.

I do tire of the washing hands or face in bathroom scenes in shorts. It's overdone. Another pet peeve is that without dialogue, all this gal had
to do was look sleep, act hung-over and stomp. Not much acting to do there.
The blood on the hands, tired. The blood on the legs, didn't buy it, didn't
look real, like the shade was off.

I liked that you used the answering machine to tie it all back to the beginning
but I felt the entire short lacking. You had us asking questions, but you
didn't answer them, that left an empty feeling. In the end, I didn't give a
wha-hoo about this girl. Nor Bobby, so if I don't care about your protag, what
does it matter? At least get me to like them.

I liked the shoes and I don't even like high heels.

**
Love the contest btw.
 
I am FINALLY getting around to some of these other films to give reviews.... sorry for the LONG time coming.

The Morning After



Script
Pretty cleverly written. I think it’s a good premise for this genre and it didn’t feel so formulaic as some of the other films.

Acting
Only one main actor here, and she did a great job! I also liked the voicemails on the phone.

Cinematography
Nice, nice, nice nice lighting! Very natural and subtle, but it all worked great!

Editing
Could use to be tightened up a bit. I think getting to the payoff sooner would have helped.

Score
Loved the score, fit well.

Overall Impressions
This film is in my top 10, it’s well executed, and you didn’t try to do too much. Thanks!
 
This is one of my faves

This is one of my faves

Ok, my review of The Morning After:

In my opinion, this one was shot absolutely beautifully. Different people have different tastes and some people want different things from their shorts. I disagree with Charli in several respects on this film because I was in love with the acting and don't agree that your lead merely had to act sleepy and tired. There are so many subtleties in her performance to my view and I believe few could have pulled it off with the projection of attitude while also keeping the ambivalence the script required.

I've finally seen all of the films in the festival and The Morning After is in my very small group that I consider the picks of the litter (which says a lot given some of the wonderful stuff in this crop). It is difficult to compare among the films in this elite group because they work on such different levels. Some shorts such as Bloody Mary and Broken Circle are tours de force of character interaction with seamless blocking and camera work. Then there are films like this one that I consider to be "quiet" and subtle with a reliance on nonverbal cues and framing to carry the story. The factors that make The Morning After work for me are similar to those in Welcome (which is a strong compliment).
I cannot say enough for your actress and your pacing. Portions of this film are near flawless and the ambiguities were absolutely a major plus in my opinion.

Let me mention a few minor critiques, if I may:

Beautifully scripted telephone messages. However, I would strongly recommend that you add a sense of room space by adding a tiny bit of verb. Moreover, when the camera shifts distance from the bed to wide if you slightly reduce the volume of the track the viewer subliminally buys the machine as the source of the sound as opposed to it floating as a constant disembodied presence similar to a VO.

While I appreciated the shift to hand-held work in the bathroom, there are a couple of shakes that jar too much and call attention to the fact that this is a small camera being hand-held.

Although I liked the profile shot of the actress with the background blown out it created a continuity problem for me when you cut to the next scenes that have almost no lighting on the left side of her face. It called out "new setup" to me and when you are shooting a truly small space such as a bathroom it is important that all shots be compatible in terms of perceived lighting to not break the suspension of disbelief.

I would much preferred to not have the actress's lengthy pause that reveals the blood on her legs. That's such a critical moment of discovery and by lingering you diminish the impact and cue the viewer that this is something you want them to see. Believe me, we would have seen it and gasped had she walked through the scene to the bed and it would have had much more power. Moreover, shortly thereafter we see the backs of her legs again as she discovers the bloody handprint on the sheets. This makes the previous long pause further redundant in my mind. Interestingly, if there were no blood on her legs I could see the pause working as a way to convey indecision or pondering on the part of the actress. However, its the blood that strikes you in the face so that whatever the motives of the character, the facile display of the blood is what comes across in the scene to me.

That's all the critique I can offer. This is marvelous and I wouldn't change a thing from your script. I LOVE the girl's attempted telephone call with no answer. Look at the two very subtle places where whe shakes her legs while waiting for an answer. That tiny body language is so natural and real. This girl just blew me away with her acting. Given the way this plays out as an extended ambiguity her reactions and motions were so absolutely natural.
What wonderful lighting you used in the bedroom. Completely beautiful shots and I completely bought this as morning light through the window.

Finally, her shoe strike at the end completely caught me by surprise and was absolutely believable. I loved the splatter on the wall and her semi-casual and brutal demeanor shown as she delivered the additional blows. WOW.
I liked the score very much but I don't see any credit for it. However you came by this music, though, it was a perfect fit.

There are so very few of these shorts that I would honestly recommend be taken to other festivals. Yours is one that I believe would do very well. If you could take this to a short festival not limited to horror I believe you'd get great attention because it really would catch an audience by surprise.

I give this short enthusiastic two-thumbs up. Oh, and I loved the shoes and I DO have a thing for high heels.


p.s., looked all night for the hidden message and finally have given up. Wherever it is, it's hidden well.
 
Mark,
Thanks for the great insight. You really picked up on a lot of the subtleties of the film which seem to be lost on many viewers.

Thanks for the suggestions, also, they are really great. I probably will try massaging the audio mix a bit like you've suggested. And I've been considering reediting the bathroom scene a bit. I'll probably take out all but one of the little zooms so the one remaining zoom will have more impact. You're right about the lighting continuity in the bathroom, it's a bit off but I just love that shot with the blown out background- the way the medium breaks down on her face when it blows out works so well for me thematically.

Thanks for taking the time to watch and write great criticism. I know how hard it is with the amount of films in the fest.
 
Oh, forgot to mention this.... the way in which she killed the guy... WHOA. Pretty insane.. and she did it so casually which made it even more sickening.
 
I'm not being sycophantic when I say that this is truly one of my top picks. Maybe because I KNOW many people don't care for or seek the subtleties is why I like this one so much. I also know what you mean about loving that profile shot with the backlighting in the bathroom. It's my favorite shot of the scene too. However, when you have that much light shown in such a specific place in a small room its important that the next cut not conflict with viewer's perception of the space. If you've got anything else to cut to in the bathroom that doesn't so drastically conflict with the bright source on the left side you could get away with going to the subsequent shots. It's just the juxtaposition of bright left light and suddenly no light when we see the left side of her face that troubles me.

So, what's the deal with the score? I'm really curious because I do like it so much and wonder where you got it.

Also, how about speaking about the bedroom lighting? Is that a key with a gobo?

I mean this in all sincerity ... if you cut a new version of this would you kindly send me a copy?
 
Thanks, Brandon, for your input. I'm glad you like the killing scene - the thought of a woman casually stomping me to death with high heels has always freaked me out.
 
the score..... I'm glad you guys liked it, and some proper credits are definitely in order (I ran out of time for submission)

I'm sort of embarrassed about where I got it, and I'm not sure how to credit it.

At work they have this stock music library - I browsed it, and most of the stuff was really lame, but I happened upon this piece which was almost perfect, but something about it didn't work.

The cool thing is, the way it's set up all the instruments are on different tracks, so I played with it and took out a lot of the instruments and was left with what I put in the piece, which just fit so perfectly with the tone of the piece - sort of playful, but somber.

I then made the variation in the middle by taking out even more of the instruments.

I broke down and bought the library for myself, because I didn't want to get screwed on the rights somehow. It put me over budget, but hopefully the tracks will be useful for someting else.

Overall, it was quite a miracle that I found this song because I started this project way too late to hire a composer.
 
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