"The Melon Drama" -By HBlack

I love you title!!! Cracks me up every time I see it.

Good luck to you. I love the resourcefulness displayed in your bts shots!

-Ted
 
Awaiting the release. I'm confident that this film will connect with the viewer emotionally in ways few have in the past.
 
I've got a cantaloupe all ready to be sliced up and consumed while I watch this one.

Waiting is the hardest part!
 
There is something uniquely magical about a slow dolly up to a perturbed melon. something magical indeed..
 
Funny stuff! Nice transitions as well.
I didn't love the supporting actor, the guys friend... but the main guy and the melon were superb. :)

Loved the bedroom moment as well... instant classic. Nice work.

Cheers,
 
Thanks Michael, glad you liked it.

The only thing I can attempt to explain away is the shake on the dollys in the living room scene, I think that was an exporting error of some sort. Clipping was my bad.
Really appreciate any criticism on this, be it positive or negative.
 
HBlack, just saw your film!

Man, you have a crazy sense of humor! Outrageous!

I enjoyed your film. I found some very nice elements in it. Transitions from scene to scene were well done. And you had some nice shots there!

I don't know if you are aware of it but the initial scene between Shaun and his friend totally breaks the line rule when shooting reverses. It was distracting... and not in a good way. I can't imagine that breaking this rule was intentional. (I know that it can be effective when used correctly.)

I thought that your lead actor did a great job. Especially having to work off of a MELON! The friend... not so much. The Melon... well, she was a *****! LOL!

Your lighting was pretty flat but I know how hard it is to shoot on a zero budget film. But I mention it so that perhaps in the future you may start to spend time in this department. The lighting at the dinner table was very dark in contrast to your other scenes.

I found your film amusing and enjoyable to watch for the most part.

Great job and congrats! I look forward to seeing more of your work!

Best,
Ted
 
Thanks Ted. I really agree with the lighting comment, that's something I need to work on. In my defense I was working with three 1ks with little to control them, but it was a fault, and it's something I'm working on fixing in my current project. Others have commented on breaking the line rule as well, and that's something I probably should have prevented. I was sitting on a table to get those which resulted in some awkward framing, I suppose it didn't occur to me to move the table... oh well, next time. Personally, I didn't like the transitions too much. I ended up using the same sound for most which I thought got repetitive, but others may have differing opinions.
 
Hey Justin, the sound of the transitions never bothered me. I think that if you establish a sound for something, you can freely stick with it.

As for lighting, totally hard on our budget! I imagine that in time you will find some creative ways to enhance this... without even adding lights. Just adjusting the positions of them and perhaps toss a few "break-up" items in front of them to create texture.

And yeah, watch out for that line rule. It is so funny that something so simple can yank you out of a film asking yourself, "why does this feel wrong?" Seems like you only had to adjust the takes on the friend at the table. He was the one that was on the wrong side of the line. His eyes were "speaking" in the wrong direction.
 
We only had 3 throughout. For the dinner scene I only brought one, and Jacob refused to act unless I let him draw the face, so that's what we ended up with. I told him it had to convey annoyance, repressed resentment and feigned cheerfulness in once, I suppose it did that well enough.

Kind of disappointed I didn't get one of your in depth reviews though, Kholi :grin:
 
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