The Future

[Kip_Kubin]

Never really thought about that, as a matter of fact. I really was so drained just trying to get simple coverage and good dialogue deliveries, that I never got a brain moment to step back and look for the drama of the frame (other than the last shot, which was in my head from the begginning - though it originally happened on a bus).

I actually shot some random coverage for the driving scenes, but none of it spoke to me. Next time.... more dogs...

thanks for commenting.

Shoot! I should have mentioned to you that your last scene's cinamatography did. And did it with economy and elegance.

 

[wcs]

THX, I'm glad to hear you liked the final shot.

 

[CallaghanFilms]

The Future...

I think your story is a solid one...in this incarnation,
however, the plotline itself was a bit murky.

If reworked & reshaped, I feel you could really be on
to something here.

My notes on the film are more inquiries than any thing else.
One big one: Is the "time traveler" telling the story over
several days and nights? Because this, as well as other key
points is a bit unclear (I would probably be correct in guessing
that the six minute edit had a lot to do with the questions I have.)
I think editing and pacing could have been the Achilles' heel here.

I must say a big congrats on the ending itself, though. I was
quite impressed with the shot of the car slamming into that of
the principle characters. It was one of the few shots in the entire
fest that I watched over and over again.

Again, I say that your story is a strong one...
and one that I could see finding an audience
if it were revamped.

Cheers

 

[Z B Brox]

I thought this was a pretty good looking film, i had no problems technically with it, though technical stuff isn't my forte. I was carried along, I just, like others, didn't feel like I cared enough where I was being carried to. The guy from the future is the best thing here, I think his acting was the most convincing and he clearly had the best lines. I found it hard to believe, though, that this Nigel guy, no matter how smart, was dreaming up time travel in his basement. For a fantasy, a Back to the Future, I might have bought it, but for something with serious ideas on its mind I found it distracting. Perhaps I'd have cared less had I *liked* the characters, but it seemed in large part that you weren't supposed to like them. So I think while it was a solid production, issues with the script and acting I would've let go had I *cared* distracted me more because I wasn't absorbed. Some very nice ideas, though, and I'm happy to see those. Even some of the best movies in the fest haven't had a whole lot new to say, and I don't think that's the case here.

 

[wcs]

One big one: Is the "time traveler" telling the story over
several days and nights? (I would probably be correct in guessing
that the six minute edit had a lot to do with the questions I have.)

I batted around the idea of throwing title cards in to give an approximate time of each conversation, but I thought it would have been too gimmicky. In the end, I hoped that people wouldn't worry too much about it.

the plotline itself was a bit murky.

Would you believe me if I said it was actually a twisted love story? I think the missing scenes help the last act of the car-ride make more sense. He was speaking broadly, but he was also talking about a single person ("always consumed in your work... you ignored the ones around you who loved you..").

Good comments. Thanks.

I found it hard to believe, though, that this Nigel guy, no matter how smart, was dreaming up time travel in his basement

Ahh, this is certainly a point I wish I had time to clear up in the six-minute script... he was at a university, doing this as an obsessive side project to the chagrin of his piers.

Even some of the best movies in the fest haven't had a whole lot new to say, and I don't think that's the case here.

Yeah, some of them told a simple story beautifully (like Synthetic Love and We are Not Alone). I think I should have cut out a few ideas and focused a couple more seconds on the characters (darn A.D.D.). Really, only one of the characters was supposed to be likable, and I mishandled her only real scene that shows up in this edit (the "turning knobs").

Thanks for commenting.

 

[iSTy]

[FONT=&quot]It made me jump when all of a sudden some of the guys speech came through on the other speaker sent a shiver down my spine. Then the music came through on the other one. Good clear picture. Not bad. [/FONT]