"The Borders of Elysium"

Wow, really interesting plot. This might be my favorite plot so far. I didn't buy the lead as an axe toting unwitting scientist but then again, maybe she was supposed to be just an everyday girl. either way I still enjoyed the film quite a bit. Good job.
 
Really cool film. Liked the concept. The actress really pulled it off. My only issue is that her narration at some points seemed a little stilted. Other than that, it was really well done with high production value. Love the shot of her at the end in the hyperbolic chamber when her hair grows. Awesome job! :beer:
 
Great feedback everyone! I wish I could hear some more negative feedback to know what didn't work for people, though. Any takers?
 
majikfraug said:
Great feedback everyone! I wish I could hear some more negative feedback to know what didn't work for people, though. Any takers?
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Sure.

Here's a shot-by-shot review of what I didn't like:

00:28, looks like he's acting the scientist part.

00:39-00:41, what does the ball have to do with anything? it's obvious you included it to satisfy the requirement. I think you could have gone with something a little bit more subtle.

01:22 her VO doesn't match her face. It sounds too... teeny. I mean, up to this point, dude you've got a 12/10 short. But then the VO comes, and she sounds like a teenager trying to be all-grown up, which is in contrast with the fabulous charisma she's been exuding up to this point.

01:35 her smile isn't natural, looks to me like she's trying to act.

02:22 oh. I see. The VO wasn't the intro woman's voice. That was confusing. I think you should have done something different here, it's jarring. When we see a character doing something, and a VO, the only natural thing for us is to assume the two go together.

02:31 his reaction isn't convincing, looks like he's trying to act surprised.

03:57 eews. I think you could have stopped with the gore by now. Too much and you run the risk of saying "look, I can do very convincing gore". It's too much. For me, at least.

04:18 "out of the field, and into the office" - she says it like a high schooler doing a documentary for a school project.

05:17 What??? No no no. Too easy. The leap she makes from trying to figure out the disease and understanding it's a conspiracy - it happens in 10 seconds? It's too jarring. Too quick.


There you have it. A list of EVERY SINGLE THING I could think of I didn't like. Notice it's a rather short list. That's because you have a killer entry here, and I'm bummed you didn't make it. She's perhaps my favorite female of the fest. She has an amazing look. Like a female Gael Garcia Bernal, you know? She can play melancholy like no other.
 
gabrielflorit said:
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There you have it. A list of EVERY SINGLE THING I could think of I didn't like. Notice it's a rather short list. That's because you have a killer entry here, and I'm bummed you didn't make it. She's perhaps my favorite female of the fest. She has an amazing look. Like a female Gael Garcia Bernal, you know? She can play melancholy like no other.
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VERY MUCH APPRECIATED!!! Truly, this gives me a great place to start my re-evaluations and figure out what needs to change before Elysium goes on to other places.
Again: thank you!
 
majikfraug said:
VERY MUCH APPRECIATED!!! Truly, this gives me a great place to start my re-evaluations and figure out what needs to change before Elysium goes on to other places.
Again: thank you!
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My pleasure! I enjoyed watching your film a second time. One day I'll be able to pull off what you do. One day.
 
Can't wait for the next fest. I thought I was gonna skip out on the next one, but LOSS-Fest is just too great of a theme :D
 
Oh, yeah, I forgot about that!
Here goes:
1. Create POD out of cardboard, spraypaint, and various other materials
2. Get a bunch of wigmaking hair and tie it together at one end
3. Arrange hair around actor
4. Roll Camera
5. Pull hair out of frame under actor
6. Reverse footage in FCP
7. Export to After Effects and do a bunch of compositing and junk
8. Render over-night
9. Throw it back into the final cut
10. Toss into a festival
11. Barely miss being a finalist :)

-Nothing to it :D
 
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