Ten - a short film - please critique

Annoying voice quality. Get someone else to read this. My ears are bleeding.

VO drags on and on, and what is said cannot be absorbed properly as it comes at you at too dense a clip. Slow it down a bit. More importantly, fewer sentences, and less dense.

The VO seems not worked on enough. As a result, it feels like an early draft. Make each sentence count in its impact - as is, it's a boring blur.

Seems like there may be some kind of idea behind this, but we don't really get involved on an emotional plane, it's all intellect, and given the quality of the VO, I'm not even motivated to explore that.

Some very nice effects (especially the clock), and visually pretty cool. It definitely has a lot of style, and that's a huge plus.

Bottom line: like the style a lot, but personally don't give a rat's @$$ about the content.
 
The VO could really use some work. It did have some good shots, It felt like you just got a lens adaptor and wanted to test it out.
 
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