STASH trailer*nudity

[terrorpictures]

this looks kinda like that other new horror film.. hummm its called... HOSTILE or something. I like the trailer. my advice is do something about the narrators voice. I agree the voice sounds to comedyish.

 

[Staven]

I'm liking this cut better. It's way more exciting. A lot better use of visuals.

I'd recommend cutting to the beat.(at least at some parts)
It's cool how your cuts get quicker close to the end. I'd take it even farther and make the cuts get even faster as it comes to the end.

The voice over is fine. Maybe the guy could redo it and make it more ominous, but it's pretty standard to have voice overs, so don't feel the need to get rid of it because the majority here doesn't dig it.

I'd add a shotgun loading sound as the guys turn the corner before they look up.

If this trailer is the trailer you plan to use to sell it, you may want to lose your title credits.(unless you are well known and it's a selling point).(you could always lose the titling later on, it's not a big thing to have in now)

This is just an idea, try it if you want, but if you are good with your cut disregard:You could try to change up the pace by stopping the song on one of the bigger drum hits. Cut to black right on the hit, but use something to motivate the cut, maybe time the shovel hit to the drum hit and the cut to black... then, fade in on one of your victims breathing heavily or crying or something(this is a slow moment), then when appropriate bring the last part of the song you've been using back in and give us the barrage of fast cuts. I do like how it ends with your antagonist saying the line.

Last thought... This trailer works for a b movie trailer. But if you want to showcase it as a "normal" film, you need to make a trailer without nudity, swearing, and not over glorify violence or gore... you may want to have a PG-13 version on standby for the future too.

Good work on improving your trailer, I look forward to getting the chance to watch the entire film!

 

[asylumproductions]

I'm liking this cut better. It's way more exciting. A lot better use of visuals.

I'd recommend cutting to the beat.(at least at some parts)
It's cool how your cuts get quicker close to the end. I'd take it even farther and make the cuts get even faster as it comes to the end.

The voice over is fine. Maybe the guy could redo it and make it more ominous, but it's pretty standard to have voice overs, so don't feel the need to get rid of it because the majority here doesn't dig it.

Yeah I have another voiceover guy in mind so i will give it a try, but I hate title cards.

add a shotgun loading sound as the guys turn the corner before they look up.

I am doing this for sure. I can't believe i overlooked that!

this trailer is the trailer you plan to use to sell it, you may want to lose your title credits.(unless you are well known and it's a selling point).(you could always lose the titling later on, it's not a big thing to have in now)
This is just an idea, try it if you want, but if you are good with your cut disregard:You could try to change up the pace by stopping the song on one of the bigger drum hits. Cut to black right on the hit, but use something to motivate the cut, maybe time the shovel hit to the drum hit and the cut to black... then, fade in on one of your victims breathing heavily or crying or something(this is a slow moment), then when appropriate bring the last part of the song you've been using back in and give us the barrage of fast cuts. I do like how it ends with your antagonist saying the line.

Man I really like the idea of bringing the temp back down with the shovel hit, so i might try that.

thought... This trailer works for a b movie trailer. But if you want to showcase it as a "normal" film, you need to make a trailer without nudity, swearing, and not over glorify violence or gore... you may want to have a PG-13 version on standby for the future too..

Yeah I'm a huge B-Movie fan, and fan of explotation films as well(hmm imagine that)
Thats were I'm targeting the film, but I am working on an alt. version I can at least use on my TV show.

Good work on improving your trailer, I look forward to getting the chance to watch the entire film![/QUOTE]
Thanks again STABB for the awesome feedback! Thats what I need to hear.

 

[asylumproductions]

Hey guys I have made more changes to the STASH trailer. i changed out a few quick shots, and made the quick cuts hit more on the beat. I also added a shotgun pump sound. These changes I think have helped a lot. I will repost the trailer when I get it into the final cut. Thanks for all of the comments.