Nice idea. Nicely shot.
Somewhat overacted buy the guy. Talking to self ... not necessary.
The opening song was a real turn off as was the silly music.
The end music was the best and I think all music should have been in that general style / flavor.
This was my first film and I was trying to focus mainly on the shooting (since I had no one else to delegate tasks to). I wanted to put the opening music and the carnival-type music in the beginning, as well as warm colors, to contrast with the cooler colors and more eerie part at the end. It doesn't seem like it did it for you, but maybe I should be a bit more consistent with the mood.