Eric Boellner
Well-known member
A little predictable, a little confusing, but generally easy to read. Not sure what I'm supposed to get out of this line: "Escalating the rise of Vampires, Werewolves or Aliens." Is that a mistake -- something you forgot to fix -- or could you just not decide, haha? The "MAN'S POV"/"REALITY" switch went on too long. It's fine to have it happen, but if you keep writing it that way, I'm completely taken out of the story.
-JMT
-JMT