Reminisce

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REMINISCE = a 13 minute short I wrote/directed/shot and edited back in 2006, for the Digital Film Academy in New York City. It was made with a DVXd100a from script to dvd in less than two weeks... note: The version that is available online is a recut version (3 minutes shorter) made this January 2007.

"JOGGING PALS AND BEST FRIENDS BEN & JEREMY LITERALLY RUN INTO AN OLD SCHOOL FRIEND NAMED SKINNY. THEY DECIDE TO MEET THAT NIGHT. BUT SOON IT TURNS OUT THEIR PAST HIDES AN OLD CONFLICT, RESULTING IN A DEATHLY INCIDENT......."

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http://www.clementinedwayh.com/tommyboth/reminisce.html

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Nobody likes this?
Please people, take a peek, as it was my real first short.
I hope u can let me know how it is for you guys. Thanks! -tommy
 
Hey, Columnbine - I know what it's like to have no one watch (or comment on) your film! But I'll check yours out when I get home. 13 minutes is a bit too long to get away with at work.

(BTW, my neglected film is further down the page - check it out)
 
The handheld effect in the beginning all the way up to until the murderer walks to the door of the victim's apartment - super irritating. It made it hard to watch. It was so bad, I wanted to stop watching. However, I liked your other short, so I watched this to the end.

Competently made. I felt the story was lacking a bit though. It would have been far more interesting if you hinted at something more about the motivation of the murder. You don't have to tell us the whole story or all the details, but you need to give us more than you did. Maybe it was a gay thing? Maybe it was something else - but give us something to go after. The third character who comes in late is totally wasted. I mean, he has no role, other than play a foil for the murderer to pull off his act. It's a wasted opportunity - he could have brought something into the story, something that would have given the relationship between these 3 some depth. Instead, all his interactions with the murderer were super flat and super expected. Waste. Just as I feel about the premise: interesting premise, but WASTED.

As usual, I liked your music choice (as I did in your other short), and I liked the way you did the opening titles (just as I liked it in your other short :)).
 
Thanks for the first review!! Finally :)

Haha, "i wanted to stop watching" sorry mate! Yeah I was hand helding that stuff pretty to the max, and I shot this in February during the blizzard last year in New York... cold times and yes my hand was freezing. But however on a big screen it isn't that bad and I guess that I originally thought of it as dollies, but that's just was not do-able by me with minimal crew and no dolly and two days shoot etc....

Motivation of the murder... Yeah I guess I thought the movie wasn't really about that. It didn't matter what happened.. This movie or at least the premise of the script was about the idea of 'Will you tell your best friend you killed someone, or won't you? and just live on' And it was basically about this guy who had some issues, both the jealousy from present and 'thing' from past. And his choice he had to make that evening... And about their 'history' , Let's just say I wrote this back when Brokeback Mountain was winning Oscars.....

The third character is the best friend. When he arrives (with that whole montage) he is supposed to bring some tension to the audience. Will he be next or not? What'll happen? At least , that was the idea behind it...

Music was the funniest part. I basically composed some mixes in Soundtrack Pro with just the Apple Soundtrack Pro Loops library! Just samples, very simple. But everybody compliments me on the music, hilarious!
 
Well, there was zero tension with the 3rd character coming in - after all, it was extremely clear that the problem - whatever it was - was between the other two guys "this must remain between us". So that didn't work at all.

As to your explanation wrt. motivation "it wasn't about motivation", I have to say it's not a very interesting thing to the audience "will he tell his best friend that he killed someone"... most folks will assume that he won't, and if he did anyway, well, big deal. In other words, if you polled the audience, I bet you most would say "I was interested in the motivation" and almost nobody "will he confess to his best friend".

Again, I don't think you had to lay it all out in detail, but getting a bit more color on the motivation would have been great, otherwise it feels very mechanistic - one starts saying "okaaaaay, so he killed him, aaaaaand??". See the problem?

Re: music. Regardless of how it was made, it worked. Of course, that may merely mean that most music used in short films is used so very badly, and the choices are so atrocious, it's easy to stand out, if it's merely well done :).
 
So what you're trying to say is that even the biggest compliment you're giving this film, it's because it's easy? Great :)

Well , thanks for the comments nevertheless, the other things are clear. I see the problems! Merci!
 
No, I'm saying the music works, and that's rare.

I think you are on the right track, but IMHO, you should work more on making your material interesting. In other words, take it to the next level.
 
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