Hey thanks! About the music-- it really wasn't even meant to be heard whatsoever, it is just part of the ambient sound for the laundromat, which is why its supposed to sound very muzak-ey and as if it were coming out of a crappy radio. Its not meant to be a score by any means... so I hope it didn't come out that way. We decided that we wanted all of the sound to be very industrial/locational, so we thought a score or anything orchestral sort of stuff would take away-- hence the elevator music and the 80's rock solo haha. Anyway, thanks again!
"PAIRED"- A Fifth Click Film
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Hey thanks! About the music-- it really wasn't even meant to be heard whatsoever, it is just part of the ambient sound for the laundromat, which is why its supposed to sound very muzak-ey and as if it were coming out of a crappy radio. Its not meant to be a score by any means... so I hope it didn't come out that way. We decided that we wanted all of the sound to be very industrial/locational, so we thought a score or anything orchestral sort of stuff would take away-- hence the elevator music and the 80's rock solo haha. Anyway, thanks again!
Brian Parker
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Definately one of my favs this fest! Great story, actors, chemistry, location. Awesome cinematography and lighting. Gave the laundromat a warm, yet industrial feel if that makes any sense. I mean there's not much else for me to say because I don't have any nitpicks. Really well done. Great job!
Thanks Champloo! Good to hear it. I'm really glad you think it hit all those great points. I'll pass the kind words about the cinematography and lighting over to the director of photography-- he did a great job, especially since we we only had 1.5 lights (one was basically a CFL household bulb that we threw around) to work with (primarily because the laundromat is a functioning, open-to-customers business during the shoots...so an excessive amount of equipment would have scared the costumers away and got us kicked out!). Anyway, thanks again and I hope others feel the same way!
edit: And whats this all about-- someone must have rated our thread a 3? We went from a 5 to a 4 today.
King Cole
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It's a great little short. Very enjoyable, very imaginative. Your images are gorgeous. There were a few focus misses (just like in my short), but overall, this looks like a high-end production. I haven't read the entire thread, but I think the ADR has already been discussed. Distracting in some parts, but does not distract enough to take me out of the story. The acting was solid, the sound design (minus the ADR) was great, the visual feel was consistent. I have very little to critique. If there was one thing, and it's not a very good critique because I can't put my finger on its source, it was that the "feel" seemed to change. It wasn't as consistent as I felt it should've been. I think it mainly stemmed from the shot within the dryer that was a bit more sinister than it should've been. Once I realized that the dryer was just bringing them together, the quirky, smart feel returned for a great ending. Hmm, this comment reads strangely, but it's the best I can do after watching and commenting and watching and commenting and watching and commenting.
Again, I really really like this short. Job well done.
JC
Again, I really really like this short. Job well done.
JC
Dick Campbell
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started out with a good premise (sock eating dryer) and thought the fishing pole idea clever plot element.
Horncastle
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edit: And whats this all about-- someone must have rated our thread a 3? We went from a 5 to a 4 today.
I think you can take that as a compliment round here. Last fest the better films were getting the lower thread ratings!
I really enjoyed your film. I think you touched all the chords for a feel-good comedy everyone can relate to (what is it about washing machines? they really do eat your clothes!). I don't really have any particular criticism. I went back and listened for the ADR having read about it here and now I know about it I can hear the problems, but I didn't notice them before so I think you didn't do such a bad job at all. I do think the stuttering in the actor's lines must have been hard to do convincingly. His clothes being sucked off was great - fishing line led through something inside the machine I imagine.
One of the best in the fest in my opinion, :thumbup:
Jason
Bryce A
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I, I, I, I, I, I liked the film overall. The concept is very cute and quirky (which I’m sure you were going for). It was nice to see you had mastery over your location. The only issue I had (which I felt was fairly large) was the blocking and line delivery. The actors did great job, but the dialogue and actions were stilted. I’m not sure if it was on their part or the director’s call (editing probably had an impact as well). Anyway, it kept me from being 100% involved in the film. I’m thinking it was all too purposeful (as in more concerned with setting the quirky tone than a natural flow). But the film is still well made. A solid entry!
Danielleus
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Hey,
Just caught the flick. I really dug the story on this one. It was a cute little piece revolving around a wonderful situation. The writing worked for this and I thought the lighting was nice. The part where the guy gets his clother sucked off? Priceless. Very very nice.
The thing that I don't get about this piece is that there isn't really anything about the characters. The guy comes off one way and then switches. Like, why doesn't he know how to use a dryer? Or why has he never had to do it before? These tidbits of characterization seemed to just get tossed aside and I think could have made this a better piece.
But I still enjoyed it and thought it was well done and very fun. Thanks for showing. It was entertaining.
Just caught the flick. I really dug the story on this one. It was a cute little piece revolving around a wonderful situation. The writing worked for this and I thought the lighting was nice. The part where the guy gets his clother sucked off? Priceless. Very very nice.
The thing that I don't get about this piece is that there isn't really anything about the characters. The guy comes off one way and then switches. Like, why doesn't he know how to use a dryer? Or why has he never had to do it before? These tidbits of characterization seemed to just get tossed aside and I think could have made this a better piece.
But I still enjoyed it and thought it was well done and very fun. Thanks for showing. It was entertaining.
Thanks... perhaps the tone does shift too dramatically, didn't really even consider that-- I was hoping that the inside of the dryer shots would just establish the dryer as more of a living presence than anything else. Anyway, thanks for all the praise!
I'm glad you liked the concept and the fishing pole part-- whats weird is that there were about 5 other ways I had written out the last scene and I'm glad I seemed to have chosen the right one.
I think you can take that as a compliment round here. Last fest the better films were getting the lower thread ratings!
I really enjoyed your film. I think you touched all the chords for a feel-good comedy everyone can relate to (what is it about washing machines? they really do eat your clothes!). I don't really have any particular criticism. I went back and listened for the ADR having read about it here and now I know about it I can hear the problems, but I didn't notice them before so I think you didn't do such a bad job at all. I do think the stuttering in the actor's lines must have been hard to do convincingly. His clothes being sucked off was great - fishing line led through something inside the machine I imagine.
One of the best in the fest in my opinion, :thumbup:
Jason
Phew, I'm glad about that rating thing. Thanks about the ADR, the team and I don't think we really did all THAT bad of a job on it, so we were hoping we wouldn't get completely crucified for it haha. In fact, we showed it to about 5 friends/family to see if they found any blatant errors and they could only pick out 1 line they thought looked weird-- and that was after 2 viewings. So I'm hoping it won't hurt us to hard. I'll discuss the fishing line trickery once viewing is over haha.
And about your last statement... :dankk2: That means a lot to me, I'm happy everyone is finding it entertaining, because thats all I wanted.
Haha, gotta love Jason's (lead actor) stuttering. We did a couple takes and he looked over at me and said-- "the stuttering is okay right?" I replied- "I love the stuttering." Its good to hear a constructive review on my directing-- especially the part about the "too purposeful" nature of the dialogue/blocking. I'll make sure to tone the purpose down a little to achieve some more naturalism in future projects. Thanks!
Thanks! This film was really a fresh start for me in terms of story-- all my other films were horror/action sort of things... so it was a big shift and it means a lot to me that you thought it was good. About the characters- There is a little more dialogue in the first scene that was cut because it ran 2 minutes over...but I don't know if it would have solved the problem here. In the character backgrounds I worked out before writing, he is essentially on his own for the first time (just moved out of his mother's house) and hasn't ever really had to do his own laundry-- especially in public for that matter. However, this piece of background basically got cut down to "I've never really had to do it myself before." No excuses, just explaining my original idea for the character to clarify it up.
Thanks again, I'm really happy you all are enjoying our film!
Hey thanks SparkyZa! We really enjoyed being part of this fest, so I'm sure we're going to enter in the next one as well (as long as it doesn't conflict with the schedule for the next project we're working on.) I'm glad you enjoyed it! :beer:
John LaBonney
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So are you ever going to clue me in about the clothes being ripped off? Time to share!
The_Happy_Haole
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nice film