Lots of nice work here, thank you for sharing your film.
The choice of shooting monochrome, the titles with white text over black, the lighting and look of most of the dinner/family shots made it feel like an old film - not quite silent movie era but an interesting deliberately dated look. Choosing that look to tell a story about current web technology impacting lives was very interesting. Mixing in the generational stories about the families added to the impact of the new and old banging up against each other.
It's difficult to comment without the sound track complete but the pacing of the edits seemed inconsistent. Some scenes were solid, smooth, revealing the characters and the story but leading us on wondering where it all was going. Other scenes the pacing of the edits seemed like they were from a different edit, maybe a rough that needed polish.
You may have done that deliberately but I found myself lost in the story on the smooth parts and observing the production value on the rougher parts. The sound edit was the most obvious issue but the visual edit was inconsistent as well.
You've done so well in so many ways that working to bring all elements in the production up to the same high level would be wise. I'd also suggest playing with the new/old motif in as many ways as possible.
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The choice of shooting monochrome, the titles with white text over black, the lighting and look of most of the dinner/family shots made it feel like an old film - not quite silent movie era but an interesting deliberately dated look. Choosing that look to tell a story about current web technology impacting lives was very interesting. Mixing in the generational stories about the families added to the impact of the new and old banging up against each other.
It's difficult to comment without the sound track complete but the pacing of the edits seemed inconsistent. Some scenes were solid, smooth, revealing the characters and the story but leading us on wondering where it all was going. Other scenes the pacing of the edits seemed like they were from a different edit, maybe a rough that needed polish.
You may have done that deliberately but I found myself lost in the story on the smooth parts and observing the production value on the rougher parts. The sound edit was the most obvious issue but the visual edit was inconsistent as well.
You've done so well in so many ways that working to bring all elements in the production up to the same high level would be wise. I'd also suggest playing with the new/old motif in as many ways as possible.
-a-