Bluewave07
Active member
Nice job. Going back to what Brown said, even though he was having a bad day much of what he commented was correct.
First, lighting in cars in always annoying. I filmed a feature a couple months ago, and the only way the shot survived was through a light shining through the moonroof. Since you had trouble with lighting, your short ended up looking a little like "Collateral". Just something to keep in mind.
Also, continuity is important. In films, great continuity is not something you notice, but choppy and incongruous shots become very distracting and potentially destructive to a short. Something that might help would just be to run through the whole scene from one angle, then the whole scene again from the other angle. That way, atleast you're not moving the camera around a lot. Also, try not to cut so much.
Otherwise, good job. My first shorts looked a hell of a lot worse than this..
First, lighting in cars in always annoying. I filmed a feature a couple months ago, and the only way the shot survived was through a light shining through the moonroof. Since you had trouble with lighting, your short ended up looking a little like "Collateral". Just something to keep in mind.
Also, continuity is important. In films, great continuity is not something you notice, but choppy and incongruous shots become very distracting and potentially destructive to a short. Something that might help would just be to run through the whole scene from one angle, then the whole scene again from the other angle. That way, atleast you're not moving the camera around a lot. Also, try not to cut so much.
Otherwise, good job. My first shorts looked a hell of a lot worse than this..