Music Video Commercial Critique

jls4

jls4

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Hey Guys,

I need some hard Critiques on a Commercial I just shot. I only have a few hours this evening to put the final touches on it, before I send it to the client. So throw your worst at it, and for anyone who wants to “Amen” (state the same thing as somebody else) please do so. The more people that pick out a specific problem lets me know that problem seriously needs to be addressed.

I won’t go too deep into the specifics because I want everyone’s mind to be clear. The only thing I’ll say is that the commercial has NOT been color corrected / graded yet, only edited

Thanks everybody. :Drogar-BigGrin(DBG)

Easiest way to view is Right Click Below and Save As

---EDIT -- Removed link - no longer needed. Thanks to those who helped.
 
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A couple of points. Some of the fast motion in the initial couple of sequences seemed 'jumbled' rather than the popular speed ramping stylization.

On a 'jump cut', at about 36 sec. (or so), you have to guys sitting on a couch/bench. There's a somewhat static shot with 'Lil Marco', I think he's introduced later as..., then a cut to a big guy at the end of the couch, and Lil Marco's head bobs in front of the camera, then cuts back to a pretty static shot of Lil Marco. The cut seems a little jarring.

Also the computer I'm viewing things at the moment has no sound, so I can't comment on that issue.
 
j1clark@ucsd.edu said:
A couple of points. Some of the fast motion in the initial couple of sequences seemed 'jumbled' rather than the popular speed ramping stylization.

On a 'jump cut', at about 36 sec. (or so), you have to guys sitting on a couch/bench. There's a somewhat static shot with 'Lil Marco', I think he's introduced later as..., then a cut to a big guy at the end of the couch, and Lil Marco's head bobs in front of the camera, then cuts back to a pretty static shot of Lil Marco. The cut seems a little jarring.

Also the computer I'm viewing things at the moment has no sound, so I can't comment on that issue.
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Thanks I'll take a look
 
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