"Minogue Space"

Thanks again everyone for your comments.

The re-edited version is much clearer with just a minute added. It'll be on Youtube shortly.

Jorg and his gang did a great job on the soundtrack and ambience.

And yeah, the shirts made it. :)
 
Okay, I have been holding back on this one, and finally, I give up. I don't know if it's genius or idiotic. Some aspects of it I took as mistakes, like the performances, but on second viewing I could not tell if what I thought were mistakes were actually on purpose.

I LOVE the idea of trying to encompass huge stories in small spaces. To me, it's one of the biggest writing challenges, but if you get it, it is wonderful. Because it means you can depend on your IDEAS to sell it.

And again, I cannot really tell if i think your writing worked, or did not work. I watch it once and say: "no way." Then I watch it again and say: "way."

So congrats on a short that made me keep coming back to try to work it out. I think this one and Michael Horrigan's are the two best for thought-provoking-ness, not only in the content, but in the storytelling. I watched both over and over and waited to post until I thought I had something intelligent to say.

Clearly in this case, I did not wait long enough. But thanks so much for putting it in. I will likely watch it several more times over the next week.
 
Thanks for the great review. You know those films that you watch and don't really understand until you sit down with your friends afterwards and start discussing it? There (hopefully) should be enough glimpses of the story to piece together the overall story and have it make sense. As mentioned before, I have pages and pages of back story, but whether it worked or not is up to the audience so I love getting feedback from people who get it. And if you don't get it I need to hear that too so I can do better next time.

Early Cronenberg, Dario Argento, and Lynch are great at doing this and were influences for this film.
 
Cool sound design. Reminded me of the three mentioned above, and Tsukamoto.

I really liked the tape machine sequence, but the narrative in the next scene seemed too fragmented and far-fetched. If in the Lynchian universe, seeing a film is more about the experience than the narrative, then I think the film succeeded.
 
Wow, trippy. Very interesting. The whole thing painted a very abstract picture where we're put in a place that our mind has to fill in the blanks. In trying to picture where they came from I find myself thinking of some strange society. It also prefaces an imensely larger piece or concept.

I'm rambling now but I love things that force the viewer to think or be creative themselves as well. Nice short.
 
Thanks. When writing I had in mind the Zen concept of whitespace, where you leave lots of empty space for the mind to fill.
 
Where do you find shirts like that?

I really don't know what to make of this, but I'm leaning towards the awesome side. I really seemed to like it...and I can't exactly tell you why.

Some shots were soft and had a bit too much headroom on others, but then again...whatever. You had something really cool going on there and you rocked it pretty hard. I was just hoping you'd end it with "where is my mind" by the pixies. Then again, you can't have it all.

Really cool film man, I enjoyed it a lot. You are one strange guy.
 
This was a pretty creative short. Not your typical plot or storyline, but the dialogue was clever and the acting was good. The film was essentially a conversation, but you were able to keep it interesting by giving the characters something cool to talk about.

I like the ending. She was catatonic, but the audience actually may not feel sorry for her. Heck they may even be happy for her. She got to go to Minogue Space. Lucky!

Good job on this. Definitely memorable.
 
The "real" version ends with "Can't Get You Outa My Head" by Kylie Minogue fading up from the background as the camera tracks in. I couldn't afford the billion-or-so dollars to license the track, so you'll have to go to YouTube to see the "proper" version (in a day or so). :-)
 
This some really innovative and original work. Nice to see someone with a clear and unique voice in their writing.


Here's some thoughts as I watch it a second time through:

Interesting scoring.

Love love love the dissolve from space to the overhead lamp. One of the things that’s so cool about it is that it looks like a rocket thruster for a moment before it becomes clear what exactly we are looking at.

The premise is of course very original and out there which I like. I felt at times in the scene the drama was forced “goddamnit I did it all for you” and at other times underplayed “we’ve been looking for you for centuries” … did she just realize at that moment who he was? She seemed pretty nonplussed.

The cut out of the music s pretty nice with the girl’s what the hell are you talking about.

The girl is pretty good actually. On the whole the mom is as well, though as I mentioned the looking for you for centuries bit was off the mark … though I think this may have been hindered more by the staging shot / shot choices than the acting. The dad however, was not very believable and seemed forced throughout to me.

I love the concept of the title and the writing around its explanation. This is really out of the box creative writing and it’s smart, fun and refreshing.

The ending was weakened a bit for me by the acting of the Asian doctor. Just did not seem believable to me.

I wish some of the shot choices and staging were more representative of the scale or stakes of the story … as the opening and the second shot with the smoke and the tape were … rather than played out completely as a domestic drama. That’s part of it sure, and that’s an interesting juxtaposition you were exploring. But having huge revelations play out without a blocking change can be tough.

So I think you have a very interesting short and some really original writing here. Very inventive and enjoyable. I hope to see more of your work in the future. If you have some other work online, please direct me to it.

:beer:
 
whoa what a story.

really liked the originality. too cool for going where you did, and you are too brave to even suggest that there might be a place filled with kylie minogue music. that idea is even crazier than the man's shirt. you filled your story with a ton of stuff.

like other posters, i am not sure if it was somewhat bad acting or if the acting was performed like that on purpose. i got no clue, the couple could act any which way and really, it could pass. still, i think the man was too stiff. the woman was good. the younger woman was okay too until she asked about what it might be like, i think i would've liked to see her not believe them so quickly. she was kind of like our stand in to this whole thing. give her a little more fight. the ending was cool though.

other than that i didnt like the tape scene too much, if you were going to show something outside of the couple's dialogue i would've liked to see the couple somewhere acting out something odd. that should'nt be too hard to do. seeing them buying groceries would be a scene i'd love to see.

cool stuff. thanks!
 
Thanks! The actors were all theatre actors from the local community theatre. None had done a film before.
 
I really liked the story and how it came together at the end. Very creative. The only problem I saw was that the acting was really good for the young girl and the woman too, but the male actor didn't seem to really get into the flow until the end. He didn't seem very believable at the beginning. Other than that, like I said, he seemed to get into it better towards the end and was able to pull it home. What an engaging shot of the girl at the end. Good job.
 
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