Inhuman

[Longfellow]

Hey guys we finished our first film on the Panasonic AG-DVX 100 B, sweet camera. We made some amateurish mistakes on a few scenes, but got some good experience with the camera. After a hard drive and external hard drive crash resulting in lost raw footage (Thank God we had backed it up the edited footage on a separate hard drive a few days earlier) lessons learned though right? The movie's sorta cheesy kind of meant for a B movie feel. Any criticism is welcome considering the amount of problems I see in the film (we haven't really begun to concentrate on acting still working on aesthetics). The film is kind of dark too on computer monitors and on Google just FYI. Anywho have a great weekend and enjoy.

http://video.google.com/videoplay?docid=4068754627835371584&hl=en

 

[OldCorpse]

I only watched the first 16 minutes, so I'll only remark on those.

You know all about the acting and tech problems, so no reason to go over that. My main issue was that nothing was happening as far as I could see for 16 minutes. Consider, that for a commercial movie, you should really best establish your premise no later than the first 10 minutes or so... this is your "selling time", meaning the audience will accept pretty much anything as a premise within the first 10 minutes or so. I sat through 16 minutes, and you didn't establish much of anything frankly: no real insight into the main character, no real challenge (he just had his job given to him around minute 14 or so), no idea of the scope or setting for the story... wow. You have 50 minutes or so for the whole movie and you basically take 16 minutes (as far as I could take the boredom) to tell us pretty much nothing? Take any classic of the genra, say thriller/crime or detective flick - or even smth like Chinatown - look how fast they establish their basic facts, and they have 131 minutes! You can complicate the story as much as you wish later on, but get the basics down lickety split! Your first 16 minutes were way too passive - nothing really was happening, and we really didn't learn much of anything. Maybe the story gets interesting later on, but you've long since lost your audience. I'd recommend not worrying about the technical stuff at this point and really getting serious about WHAT you are shooting, before you even think about HOW you are shooting. Good luck!