.... In The Night

HappyGobo said:
Nice job, creeped me the f*&k out! I was kind of taken out of it with the way you keyed Kevin though, i.e. the keyframing was pretty obvious. Maybe if you pushed in through the hole instead?
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Yeah, I tried to make him look like he was floating to her when she screamed, but it turned out to look more like he was magnetically drawn to her. I could have made him more translucent also being that he is a ghost but I thought he would lose too much detail.
Glad it "creeped you the f*&k out!" That was my aim. Thanks!:Drogar-BigGrin(DBG)
 
ooooo pregnant women aren't supposed to drink! Besides that I thought it was very creepy, and my roommate was seriously freaked out!
 
Great look and mood to the film. I thought the shots of the pregnant women were very cinematic. I thought the continuous dolly in during the phone conversation was a little too much and craved a cu on the older women to reveal more of her emotion. Special affects were good up to the reverse shot. All in all one of the better films in the bunch. Nice work.
 
mrcheapyasui said:
ooooo pregnant women aren't supposed to drink! Besides that I thought it was very creepy, and my roommate was seriously freaked out!
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They have to in All Hallows Fest! Glad it seems to have freaked everyone out, that's what we thought should be the feel of an All Hallows Fest Entry, and so far it seems it was successful in delivering that element.
Thanks everyone for letting us know how you feel about it!:thumbsup:
 
bosindy said:
Great look and mood to the film. I thought the shots of the pregnant women were very cinematic. I thought the continuous dolly in during the phone conversation was a little too much and craved a cu on the older women to reveal more of her emotion. Special affects were good up to the reverse shot. All in all one of the better films in the bunch. Nice work.
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Wow, thanks for the input! I too wish I had more time with Julie (the older woman) To get some different shots, unfortunatley with free actors I had to work around their time schedules and none of them were together for any of the filming. The reverse shot at the end was something we did last minute, I had watched it probably a hundered times and became numb to it so I thought we should add something more, it probably wasn't neccesary and I understand why you probably didn't like it! Thanks again for the input glad you liked it!
 
I rather enjoyed this film, more than I thought I would, kept me on the edge of my seat! Nice suspense level!

I think for never having the actors together on any given day, you pulled off a really cool ending!
 
Glideshot said:
I rather enjoyed this film, more than I thought I would, kept me on the edge of my seat! Nice suspense level!

I think for never having the actors together on any given day, you pulled off a really cool ending!
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Thanks Glideshot, it's good to hear what people have to say about our film good or bad, luckily for us, so far it has had a pretty good response.
I had set days that everyone was suposed to be there, but life stepped in and each time I only had one actor present. It really helped that I storyboarded the entire short, had I not, the end sequence probably would have been a disaster.
 
Good work man... Needs work in the effects area, the hole in the head shot, but if you worked on that a bit more then it'll fell like a complete movie. That shot is my only complaint, it just took me out of the feeling.
 
Jay Rodriguez said:
Good work man... Needs work in the effects area, the hole in the head shot, but if you worked on that a bit more then it'll fell like a complete movie. That shot is my only complaint, it just took me out of the feeling.
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What would you have done in that shot, to make it better, I would appreciate the feedback?
What about that shot took you out of the feeling?

Thanks,

~Kory
 
It was the way that you moved the head to fit over top of woman so that we could see her through the hole in his head. I liked what someone said in one of the previous threads about keeping the head still and makeing the camera "fly" through the hole so that we see her. That, in my opinion, would make it feel more on point.
 
Jay Rodriguez said:
It was the way that you moved the head to fit over top of woman so that we could see her through the hole in his head. I liked what someone said in one of the previous threads about keeping the head still and makeing the camera "fly" through the hole so that we see her. That, in my opinion, would make it feel more on point.
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That would be sweet! Maybe, I'll put up a version with that shot later! I guess I didn't realise that is what HappyGobo meant! Thanks for the suggestion!:thumbsup:
 
Here are some comments:

Very cool titles. Nice color correction effect.

I bought the acting (Justin) in the opening scene. That's hard to pull off and he really nailed it. Not so sure about the women's performances, however.

Sound of the rain over the piano - very nice. But how about some lightning flashes to go with the thunder?

Interesting story - until he opened the door. Then it totally lost me. Just didn't buy the ending at all - and I wanted to.

Thanks for this.
 
George_Bailey said:
Here are some comments:

Very cool titles. Nice color correction effect.

I bought the acting (Justin) in the opening scene. That's hard to pull off and he really nailed it. Not so sure about the women's performances, however.

Sound of the rain over the piano - very nice. But how about some lightning flashes to go with the thunder?

Interesting story - until he opened the door. Then it totally lost me. Just didn't buy the ending at all - and I wanted to.

Thanks for this.
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The titles I made in Live Type it's a pretty cool program and there's alot you can do with it!
Glad you liked Justin's performance, he's the only actor we had with any real experience acting, I thought the girls did a great job for being first timers they were alot more comfortable with the camera than others I have worked with.
The lightning was a no go I experimented with a strobe light but it ended up looking like a strobe light on camera! I'm open to better suggestions for lightning effect.
What would you have done for the ending? I would like to hear what would make for a better ending, Seriously?
I'll post my thoughts about yours soon there's alot of threads I still need to get to.
Thanks for the feedback.

~Kory
 
Movie Stunts, this was a well shot short. I liek the way the women were lit while the background was completely black. Gave a cool feeling of limbo.
 
Jay Rodriguez said:
no problem man! let me know if u do it, I'd like to see how it turns out.
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Give me a few days, I have a funeral to attend this weekend. But I will get it done!

mentatDUKE said:
Movie Stunts, this was a well shot short. I liek the way the women were lit while the background was completely black. Gave a cool feeling of limbo.
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I hope you got the joke I posted in your thread, If you thought it was offensive, I'm sorry! I thought about it later that you may not have liked it.
Thanks for the nice words, I kinda cheated on the background being dark. I shot Julie against a Black curtain, Hiroko against a Maroon colored wall, then I added a Vignette to the entire film To make it as dark as possible!
 
MOVIE STUNTS said:
... What would you have done for the ending? I would like to hear what would make for a better ending, Seriously? ...Thanks for the feedback.

~Kory
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Good point. Here's what comes to mind.

"She wakes up on the sofa. She hears the sound outside. She's freaked out. Then the footsteps get closer to the door. She looks over and sees ... that the door is unlocked. Still closed, but unlocked. She gets up and, trying to be as quiet as possible, slowly makes her way to the door (think tracking closeup on her feet, tension building). Just as she gets there, the sound from the hallway stops. She reaches for the lock ... just as the door handle slowly starts to turn (think of the symmetry about what is happening on both sides of that door - one seen and one unseen). She sees the turning door handle (XCU on eyes widening). She turn the lock and it CLICKS into place. The door handle suddenly turns faster and then the door rattles as the thing outside tries to get in ... but can't. She's successfully locked the door - keeping it out. It tries again. But still can't get in. She breathes a sigh of relief ... and there is the sound of the thing outside moving away from the door. Shaken but relieved, she turns and starts to go back to the sofa ... whereupon the thing BURSTS through the door, grabbing her from behind and we CUT to black."

Could be cheesy depending upon the pacing, but I'm a big fan of the "less is more" school. Don't show it all. Let the audience draw imaginary dots between what they think they see on screen and what they think they want to see. Perhaps not better. Just different.

Best.
 
George_Bailey said:
Good point. Here's what comes to mind.

"She wakes up on the sofa. She hears the sound outside. She's freaked out. Then the footsteps get closer to the door. She looks over and sees ... that the door is unlocked. Still closed, but unlocked. She gets up and, trying to be as quiet as possible, slowly makes her way to the door (think tracking closeup on her feet, tension building). Just as she gets there, the sound from the hallway stops. She reaches for the lock ... just as the door handle slowly starts to turn (think of the symmetry about what is happening on both sides of that door - one seen and one unseen). She sees the turning door handle (XCU on eyes widening). She turn the lock and it CLICKS into place. The door handle suddenly turns faster and then the door rattles as the thing outside tries to get in ... but can't. She's successfully locked the door - keeping it out. It tries again. But still can't get in. She breathes a sigh of relief ... and there is the sound of the thing outside moving away from the door. Shaken but relieved, she turns and starts to go back to the sofa ... whereupon the thing BURSTS through the door, grabbing her from behind and we CUT to black."

Could be cheesy depending upon the pacing, but I'm a big fan of the "less is more" school. Don't show it all. Let the audience draw imaginary dots between what they think they see on screen and what they think they want to see. Perhaps not better. Just different.

Best.
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"Less is more" is definitley a school I subscibe to, I'm also a big fan of "In your screaming face" school so I Mixed the two together. I actually really like the ending you suggested, the only problem I could foresee is, a woman in a big house by herself and hearing footsteps would probably freeze in place, in shock!..... Then again, It is a horror movie, and people always do the stupidest things in horror flicks. Anther reason I did it the way I did, is because I am learning Shake right now and am eager to use what I have learned in practical ways! (it's good practice). Thanks for the cool ending though, I enjoyed reading it, and I like your style!

~Kory
 
deedive said:
great effects. i hope she didnt come with kevin.lol
great shot at 3:19
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Thanks, Deedive glad you liked the effects!
Well.... She didn't go with Kevin, .....:evil:not willingly anyways :zombie_smiley:
It wasn't raining outside in 3:19 so I had to spray the window with the hose, I hoped noone would notice, glad you liked that shot!:thumbsup:
 
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