Gritty Western Scene. My first shot at this

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Phil_UK

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Please Rate this. What do you think of it?
The guy in the video is my brother... I shot it with a Rebel T2i and the kit lens, because i didnt have my nifty fifty with me...

Deffo watch in 1080P

Any questions, just shoot.

Oh btw: If you want to know. I am 15 Years old and come from the UK!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MFQ8nG0owPo

Regards,

Phil
 
you have ghosting in footage,look at the frames one by one ,theres 2 frames in one once in a while,it shouldnt look like that,you have bad export settings,if you shot it with 24p dont export as 25 or dont export as 24p if you shot in 23.976,export as 23.976.
 
Phil_UK said:
Please Rate this. What do you think of it?
The guy in the video is my brother... I shot it with a Rebel T2i and the kit lens, because i didnt have my nifty fifty with me...

Deffo watch in 1080P

Any questions, just shoot.

Oh btw: If you want to know. I am 15 Years old and come from the UK!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MFQ8nG0owPo

Regards,

Phil
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My opinion is for a test it was pretty good. Don't know where that would go in a 'film'. But at least the talent had enough exposure. Some of the backgrounds in some of the shots could have better selected, to reduce visual clutter
with the talent.

the one thing that really bothers me is the use of 2.40:1 style aspect ratio, especially when the actor stands and his head is cut off by the top of the frame. I'd recommend using the native 16:1, or if you have a need for a 'film' ratio
use 1.85:1.

With that in mind, try some shots with the actor placed on 1/3 frame locations, like left 1/3 looking to the right, right 1/3 still looking to the right, and same for right 1/3 looking left, to see how framing and actor eyeline affect the
visual impact of the image.
 
If you are going to use that aspect ratio, make sure you adjust it's placement so it doesn't cut off the talen't head. I really, really like the location you chose, but the shaky movement and the headroom issue in the establishing shot distracted me from it. If you feel like reshooting it, try a locked off, low angle, wide.

I personally like the placement of your brother in the 2nd and 3rd shots. Since he is in such an unbalanced place in the frame, it makes the viewer a little uncomfortable, and thus makes us feel like the talent is uncomfortable (which works, since he's about to shoot someone). But, that feeling is instantly shattered when you cut to the 4th shot. Get rid of it, and see how it plays cutting directly to the gun. You broke the rules of composition, but did you know that you did? And did you mean to?

The grade looks cool, but it could be less heavy handed. Also, to me, green doesn't scream "western."

It seems like the scene was about a man deciding to kill someone. Unfortunately it took me more than a couple of viewings to be sure of that. You could reshoot it in plenty of different ways. One might be to have him sitting on the log, thinking. Use those nice awkwardly framed thinking shots. He makes up his mind, and as if it is the hardest thing he's ever done, he takes out his gun. Quick cuts of him fumbling to load the gun. His frenzy stops as soon as he cocks it. Wide, stable shot. Maybe he looks up at the camera or something.

The choice of music was great. Is that from a soundtrack?

It's rad that you are out shooting. Keep going.


Oh... that gun looked real. Thats probably not the best idea.
 
Thanks for all the feedback. I will be out shooting in a week or so and I will consider all the tips you gave me.
Yeah, that gun looked pretty real. It is an A.Uberti Blank firer, although the shells loaded werent "hot".

Thanks for all the feedback.
 
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