Glimpse

The pacing dragged up to the killing. The graphic extremity of the kill after suffering the lead up made me feel a little dirty, like I was watching a snuff flick or something. Kudos for gore though, it made me wince away from the screen. I would equally have liked to have seen him trip on some garbage cans just as he was moving in and land in a pile of garbage while cursing under his breath.... while she walks off in the distance maybe chatting on her phone.
 
thanks so much! It was supposed to be a payoff.... no script and racing aganist the rain storms... the payoff turned out better than I imagined.

THANKS for wincing!
 
If this was made into 3' it would be one of the best!!!
The coffe house sequence was way too long for me, I understand what you tried to achieve there but especially for a 6min film, it went on and on....

I also disagree with the type of knife you used....but that's just the serial killer in me....

I loved the editing and the killing frames you used..it was very realistic....as for the story...well I couldnt make out what he was saying while watching her...the sound was ...sorry but cant find another word but 'bad'....however you made a great horror/psycho thriller flick by using the typical CRAZY PSYCHO PEEPING TOM theme....it worked great for me!

Really, if it was shorter I would watch it again and again but I have to be honest...second time i skipped most of it to go to the end sequence....

ps. nice touch with the coffe shop in&out bits...the sound transitioned very well even though the levels were way off...
 
I've got to say your film is the most disturbing of all. Yes stalkers, I've read many cases and it's basically how it happens. Great work.
 
How it needs to happen is this leads up the part where the killer attacks, but we discover....The girl is a NINJA! She then whips his gross butt and stabs him repeatedly with the knife...er.....um....wait. Nice job again!
 
I was thinking of putting a flashback sequence showing her getting the last "Peeps" on aisle 3, that he had his eye on....
 
Hey greeches, good job on your film! It has so many good things going for it.

I like the slow, methodical pace leading up to the murder. I was wanted it to push forward but when it didn't it created an uneasy tension in me. I think that is a good thing in your film.

The performances by your actors were great. So subtle. Nothing unnatural at all. Such a "day in the life" feel about it. (a bad day... for her!)

The cinematography and camera work were well done. Just some outstanding imagery you have going on there.

The make-up was great. I don't know what is suppose to be wrong with that guy, but his make-up was flawless. (I tink that I've seen people like this before... I'll be a little more careful in the future!)

That was a sick knife and stabbing scene. The best that I've seen. My one criticism was that the first blow and the shot of her immediately afterwards looked like too much blood. The blood was all the way up around the collar and yet he stabbed her in the, um, uh.. the chest. This caught my eye both times that I viewed your film.

Again, great camera work and editing. It was a very simple but disturbing film. I hope that is what you were going for!

Well done! Looking forward to more of your work!

Ted
 
I disagree with Kohli, I kinda liked the makeup.

Pace suffered, cinematography was decent, but nothing spectacular.

The stabbing was a bit disturbing. Good sound design. I think it suffered a bit with the editing though, after the first three I could tell it wasn't the girl that was being stabbed. Maybe if you could have got a bit of movement in there? I dunno. I've never been brutally stabbed so I'm not sure how much "pain squirming" would be going on.

I liked it, but wish it had had a bigger story.
 
I thought the same thing about the blood but then I said to myself...I wasnt there so I dont know..loool....
 
Greeches been a fan of yours since way back now.

I think I understand what you’re trying to achieve as an artist, an overall feeling, solid creepy images, and brutality.

It worked.
Yeah it was a little light on script, but man I love your style.

Loved the make-up, best killing - realistic wise, that knife was wicked looking.
I felt genuinely shocked when the attack finally happened. No compromises just as it would be, vicious and bloody.

A beautiful looking gore fest for me, thanks for making it.

J.P.


PLEASE LEAVE COMMENTS ON BROKEN CIRCLE GUYS (WE NEED EM!)
 
This didn't work for me. I know this is hororfest, and stalking women and gratuitous gore are among the unfortunate conventions of horror, but because there was so little character development -- why is he stalking her? -- it felt overly gratuitous. I didn't care about the character being stalked at all since I saw her face so seldom and when I did, her expressions were mostly vapid, and I didnt care about the stalker because I had no clues as to his motivation. And everytime there was a CU on his make-up, it took me out of the story completely -- it looked like make-up, not skin, and it interfered with my suspension of disbelief. And finally, if I were walking down an empty street and some guy were following me within the distance that guy was -- believe me, I'd know it and be doing something about it -- like calling 911 loudly and obviously on my cell phone, turning into one of those yards where I thought people were at home, something. So, for me, it was just another, "Let's slice up a woman" film, and I don't think those really add anything new to the genre. On the positive side, the gore was realistic; I just wish you'd gone for more than that.
 
^I'm glad to have affected you as to write such a long review!

Thanks!


JP: I really liked Broken Circle, it was so strong yet such a simple action. I'll leave more direct feedback on your board tho! THanks again!
 
This movie looks great but the story seemed pretty much non-existent.
A shame, because if you had a great story looking like this you would be competing with the best in this fest. Now it's more like a style practice. I'll try and do an extended review later in october if I can find the time.
 
I thought this was one of the better films. There wasn't much in terms of story, but...

I thought it was very well shot - I really like the camera work. I think it was the only films that was shot outside during the day and didn't look like total crap.

I also thought the stabbing bit was very effective - much more than a lot of the others that tried to use aftereffects or cg to pull off the stunts. Sometimes stabbing a dummy (I'm assuming) is better.

The acting and makeup were good. How did you do the guy's face?

The only thing that needs work is the sound, it was really bad - it kind of sounded like you used the onboard mic. You could easily fix it though with some ADR and foley.
 
Hey greeches, thanks for the film! BEST STABBING SCENE goes to you!

Congratulations and good luck!

This has been a fun experience!!!

Ted
 
Another film that sounded like it was processed through a flanger...

And another flat out snuff film.

This one hard's to rate because as I was somewhat put off by it's gratuitous violence, the thing looked damn good!

This one makes a great opening scene to feature thriller. I hope you guys can build a good screenplay around this and do something bigger.

But as a stand alone piece, I couldn't recommend it to anyone.


John G.
 
Hey greeches. Sorry to be repetitive, but I do feel that it's a shame that you didn't develop a story or characters around this. It was REALLY well shot. The lighting, the camerawork, the villain looked interesting, the girl was pretty. If you just went the extra mile and made a complete story you'd be in a really good place. This is especially true since so many shots lingered for so long. You could have really fit something into this.

The makeup job and violence was very realistic. Both the man and woman had great performances during the attack.

I'd love to see what else you have done/can do.

Don't forget story next time.

Beautiful to watch...

Have a good one.
 
Just finally getting the time to copy the notes I compiled in a Word doc while watching the shorts:

Cool title, sound could have blended/transitioned better into the film. Some GREAT camera work & use of 35mm adapter, but it got a little excessive with the hand held at times on the girl getting coffee. I think a cool way to have gone about this, and two have separated the worlds even that much more of the stalker and the victim, would be to have had smoother more in control shots of the girl (when we’re with her at least), and shaky hand-held when we’re on the guy who’s out of control. When viewing from his POV, those could also have been shaky. 3:51 – not sure if this was planned or not, but that lens flare there (glints in his eyes as well) is absolute MONEY! While there was a nice use of blood here, I felt it was too excessive too quickly. She’s only been stabbed once & her front is already covered in blood, not to mention just as he’s pulling the knife out, we already see blood on her back? This was actually fairly well edited, but I have to knock it down some in this area for not figuring out how to compress/render out to 16x9 .. the player is that ratio, but the film is obviously still 4:3 ratio. A good editor is going to know delivery formats, and how to get the film into them correctly.
 
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