Dark Disciple Movie - Shot on GH1

Thank you.

We're 1/3 through the rough edit. It's much harder than I thought.

Glad I got Barry's "Sound" video, as pro audio makes a huge difference!!!

Sorry that the clip ends as a cliffhanger. At that point, we hadn't filmed the rest.

Thank you again to everyone at DVXuser. Your input has been tremendously helpful throughout this entire process!
 

Regarding the lens, settings, etc.; I used the stock lens, and a 50mm, smooth, FHD, shutter 50, iso 100-400 and every trick that DVX members taught me over the last two years.
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Guys, I'm gearing up for the final sequences (lots of action, gunfire, etc.) and wanted to get a DVD series on "doing action right". Can anyone suggest anything?
 
Take this as constructive criticism as I thought the images looked great, but I had no sense from the clip that it was either a thriller or action, or of any sort of plot. Besides the quick cuts near the beginning (from which I could not catch a reference) and the music, I didn't get what was happening or what may be expected to happen, etc.

Edit - I see you wrote that it is not a preview, but a clip from a nightmare sequence. My only criticism would then be about the quick cut-outs...I couldn't see what they were...too fast.
 
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Definitely recommend:

The DV Rebel's Guide - by Stu Maschwitz

http://www.amazon.com/DV-Rebels-Gui...=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&s=books&qid=1294860765&sr=1-1

he doesn't speak about choreography so much, but about making the scene look bigger by focusing on each technique and working shot by shot to build a bigger 'whole'.

and for some DVD loveliness:

BROKEN

a tale by Alex Ferrari

http://whatisbroken.com/index_short.html

I own the DVD and the behind the scenes offers lots of great tips on adding production value.

http://www.whatisbroken.com/dvd.html

Hope that helps.
 
I am no expert, but two things that I would change...

1. You watch the whole sequence and the ending gives us no information the scene. The music seems to suggest that there is something scary. Maybe I missed something though?
2. Also I found that the shots were too long to keep my attention. I would maybe think about trimming out some of the shots or trimming the length?

Hope this helps.
 
Thanks for the input.

I only threw the clip out there to see if I was missing something major. i.e. bad composition, lighting etc. I wanted to make sure I was going in the right direction (quality wise) before continuing much further. Hoping that some expert(s) on DVX would catch any major blunders before I finished the project.
 
Very nice looking pics - i loved the colours of the lighting i saw (natural? im a sucker for the blue lights in the interiors!) The only thing that stood out was more a technical thing perhaps - but was the composition set against the sea - (the sea wasnt straight!) Fine if thats intentional but maybe worth correcting in post as it made my eye wander a little! Pretty and abstract!
 
Everyone has opinions so if this helps great. Overall you have some really really nice imagery on this.. Totally pro in everyway and looks very cinematic. Especially as mentioned the blue machinery and the tracking shots look awesome. There's some real sense of style and great build up and composition. Its a huge compliment to say that it looks expensive, and it does. You have a great location and it's used very well...

My only suggestions are that the opening seems more like a travel film/travel doc than a cinematic narrative. So many static shots of the scenery that doesn't build up to much in the opening.

I also think that the shaky POV is a bit too on the nose and seems out of place..... and the snap pull out with sound effects seems kind of forced, especially since there's no ending with something impactful or sudden or something that turns the story around and makes it all seem more like a "punch line"... or that it's not what we thought, etc...

Overall it's a nice moody piece but does seem a bit pregnant in the lenghts and the opening just is kind of ping pong from one static to another... but it's all hard when it's a scene taken out of context...

Keep it up and you have some great stuff in here, just might need time to sculpt it...
 
Thanks so much! I was hoping you guys gave it the pro nod.

I agree with all your comments. I just haven't finished the scene yet, so I haven't given it a professional polish. Not to spoil it, but the actor will soon turn and see the killer looming above him and that's when it gets really good.
 
Very good scenes you have there. Like Justyn mentioned also the opening didn't really seem like it was going to be a scary movie. Obviously our opinions are based on how we would have done the same shot based on our desire and what we personally want to see. What we think is irrelevant and opinions are just that, they are not any better than what you actually have. Don't forget that it is your movie and you are trying to reflect what you want us to see the way you envision it yourself.

Keep up the good work, and the little scenes like the gears of the elevator are scenes that make the movie more appealing. Personally I would cut the scene of the guy starring outside the window down a bit, it's too long and instead of it I would add a few more short scenes going back and forth between the "calm" and "scary/intense". It would be cool if you could shoot a few frames of the guy starring outside the window but this time from outside the building focusing on him (through the window) and slowly zooming out while revealing the size of the building adding to the suspense of one person being inside a run down old mill or whatever the building is. Can't wait to see more of it, and nice color by the way. Thank you for sharing it.
 
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