SHORT: crit my fight scene

I'd say that the "I don't want to die" line needed to be more emphatic.

And, when the gal on the right was pushed back, I might have cut it quicker or inserted a reaction shot (something like her head snapping back in a close-up). Otherwise, it seems like, "OK, she'd be falling onto the pavement if she were a professional stunt woman but, here, she just takes a few steps back because that pavement is too hard of a surface to fall on without much padding". Maybe I would have moved the camera a little more too.

Just an opinion, mind you. B&W 480p looks pretty retro. Maybe it needs more fake film scratches for the final render.
 
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