Brian Parker
Well-known member
Good film. Everybody has pretty much already covered any points that I would make but I think you did a good job making things work, told a lot of story in a short time frame, and it was wrapped up at the end.
Bedtime Story by DJ Lewis
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From another thread....
Sweet film: Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Beautiful girl: Cupid is her boyfriend in real life, watch yourself
Why Cupid stayed in the room: Well... depressed/angry people do unusual things sometimes.
Working with babies: That's a whole thread in itself.
Sweet film: Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Beautiful girl: Cupid is her boyfriend in real life, watch yourself
Why Cupid stayed in the room: Well... depressed/angry people do unusual things sometimes.
Working with babies: That's a whole thread in itself.
I still can't get over this too! I guess I got really lucky...
mentatDUKE
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Cool story. I like humanizing takes on mythological figures. When you showed the pregnancy reveal, I was like "WHOA! Cupid slipped one past the goalie!"
I liked the feathered wings on Cupid. The humor was light but effective. The little touches sell this for me. Listening closely to that couple arguing revealed some funny dialog, the girl taking Cupid back to her house to nurse him to health, and the ending are all tiny details that add texture to the story.
Creative film.
I liked the feathered wings on Cupid. The humor was light but effective. The little touches sell this for me. Listening closely to that couple arguing revealed some funny dialog, the girl taking Cupid back to her house to nurse him to health, and the ending are all tiny details that add texture to the story.
Creative film.
I liked the storytelling aspect of this one. I'm always a sucker for films that work in a storytelling element and the more fantastic the better.
I dig the heart of the story and off-beat nature of it (reminded me a bit of a Life Less Ordinary...) and I was almost expecting someone to pick up cupid's bow and arrow and go on a 'love-spree' once he dropped it!
But otherwise, very sweet and some great ideas here!
I dig the heart of the story and off-beat nature of it (reminded me a bit of a Life Less Ordinary...) and I was almost expecting someone to pick up cupid's bow and arrow and go on a 'love-spree' once he dropped it!
But otherwise, very sweet and some great ideas here!
Hunter Hampton
Carbonite Member
Is this part of the sequel?
Was he smoking a cigarette while drinking moonshine?
Was he smoking a cigarette while drinking moonshine?
Rodney V. Smith
DVXFest Promo Guru
There were some good elements in this movie and a few good moments as well that were definitely worth watching for. The story was enjoyable and some of your shots were pretty good. The actors were the weak point in this movie, and while some of it can be fixed in editing to shorten some of those moments, most times it felt like they were waiting for their lines of for someone to yell "action". Sit down and edit with pacing in mind, use some cutaways and it will significantly improve this piece, maybe with the right cuts you can even improve your actors performances... I've had to do a similar thing in one of my first shorts where we had one weak actress, but got so much coverage on her that we were able to make her look a lot better than she was. Amazing what you can do with editing...
Anyway, great offering and nice effects there. Yeah , you had some technical problems, but nothing you can't fix with a little more time and practice. All in all it was well done.
Brave choice going with Cupid and well done.
Anyway, great offering and nice effects there. Yeah , you had some technical problems, but nothing you can't fix with a little more time and practice. All in all it was well done.
Brave choice going with Cupid and well done.
DUKE, Jojo, and Puck: Thanks for watching, I'm glad you were able to get past the film's short comings, and enjoy it for what I hoped it would be: a good story.
Just in case you didn't catch the top of the thread, time was a huge hurdle in the creation of this short (not to mention that our 3d artist's laptop was stolen 24 hours before the deadline.) So once everyone recoups from the fest, we can focus on cleaning things up (and I can include the scenes I had to cut to make this 6 minutes.)
Hunter: that's Cupid's evil twin brother, and he definitely will be making an appearance in the sequel - "Bedtime Story 2: Electric Boogaloo"
Just in case you didn't catch the top of the thread, time was a huge hurdle in the creation of this short (not to mention that our 3d artist's laptop was stolen 24 hours before the deadline.) So once everyone recoups from the fest, we can focus on cleaning things up (and I can include the scenes I had to cut to make this 6 minutes.)
Hunter: that's Cupid's evil twin brother, and he definitely will be making an appearance in the sequel - "Bedtime Story 2: Electric Boogaloo"
Rodney V. Smith
DVXFest Promo Guru
Hey we're all suckers for good stories. Now... about this "Hunter" dude.....
EDIT: oops, just ralized that it was a user namded HUmter.. but Hunter would be a good name for Cupid's evil brother....
EDIT: oops, just ralized that it was a user namded HUmter.. but Hunter would be a good name for Cupid's evil brother....
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Hmm... One spreads love, the other spreads hate... :happy:Something to think about...
Hey DJ nice job:
Some thoughts as I watch a second time:
Nice opening with the music and the baby monitor. Music lets us know that something else is up beyond the simple domestic scene we’re seeing.
Pretty well put together and interesting. My only problem is … I hit you with my car at full speed and just bring you home vs. call the cops, paramedics … etc.
His line … “For what” very simple, honest, funny. In other words well written and played.
Liked the touch of the red long johns.
I’ve said this in a couple of reviews now, but here again I found the cast to be charming,]
Nice job dood :beer:
Some thoughts as I watch a second time:
Nice opening with the music and the baby monitor. Music lets us know that something else is up beyond the simple domestic scene we’re seeing.
Pretty well put together and interesting. My only problem is … I hit you with my car at full speed and just bring you home vs. call the cops, paramedics … etc.
His line … “For what” very simple, honest, funny. In other words well written and played.
Liked the touch of the red long johns.
I’ve said this in a couple of reviews now, but here again I found the cast to be charming,]
Nice job dood :beer:
Thanks for your comments Jack! Whew, fest is almost over and I haven't Jermey Hyler-ed yet....
This has been a big red question mark for a several, so I'm trying to figure out how to deal with this in the next version. So far I have two options:
1. Show the real speed limit on sign that was shot. 25 Mph... The scene will play out with her running to his side to inspect the damage; bloody, bruised, but nothing major
2. Per a crew member: "He is an angel, right?" Maybe he heals pretty quick, or what ever... just let the audience wonder.
Any thoughts?
This has been a big red question mark for a several, so I'm trying to figure out how to deal with this in the next version. So far I have two options:
1. Show the real speed limit on sign that was shot. 25 Mph... The scene will play out with her running to his side to inspect the damage; bloody, bruised, but nothing major
2. Per a crew member: "He is an angel, right?" Maybe he heals pretty quick, or what ever... just let the audience wonder.
Any thoughts?
Neither really mitigates the problem ... she thinks she's hit someone and he's unconscious ... so at 25 MPH or 50 MPH normal "good" people do not break several laws and social contracts and moral taboos and leave the scene of the accident and lug the victim home. Especially since we know if your kid hits his head falling off the swing set you don't let him sleep.
If he has a conscusion he could go into a coma.
If she was some kind of eccentric, then ok. But it really has nothing to do with going 25 or 50. It has to do with the fact that he's unconscious and what she would plausibly do after hitting someone.
Now .... with a reshoot, he could briefly insist on not going to a hospital (we would presume that he didn't want to go there so they wouldn't find out he was "different").
That would help some. He can do all manner of things to justify behavior outside normal human patterns, but she has to act like a real person.
Also I would give him just one bump on the head.
If he has a conscusion he could go into a coma.
If she was some kind of eccentric, then ok. But it really has nothing to do with going 25 or 50. It has to do with the fact that he's unconscious and what she would plausibly do after hitting someone.
Now .... with a reshoot, he could briefly insist on not going to a hospital (we would presume that he didn't want to go there so they wouldn't find out he was "different").
That would help some. He can do all manner of things to justify behavior outside normal human patterns, but she has to act like a real person.
Also I would give him just one bump on the head.
Well if he looks sooo beat to hell it strains credibility even further that she wouldn't take him to a hospital.
Maybe not just one. But still putting yourself in her shoes as someone that doesn't know he's an angel ... you hit a stranger with your car ... they're unconscious ... what do you do .... what do you do
Maybe not just one. But still putting yourself in her shoes as someone that doesn't know he's an angel ... you hit a stranger with your car ... they're unconscious ... what do you do .... what do you do
