"Basement Story" - wcs

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Since the fest is almost over, here are a bunch of random details if anyone's interested:

There were three of us working on the short: Me (William), Alex, and Libby. I found Libby via a Craiglist ad three weeks before the deadline. She'd done a fairly large amount of theater work before this. Alex was a friend from work who had no previous film experience, but was an excellent couchpusher, sushi-getter, and camera monitor when I had to be on camera as Cedrick. If Libby hadn't been so easy to work with, and Alex hadn't been so willing to help, the short just wouldn't have been made.

The shoot took place a week before the deadline, and took 10 hours.

Screenplay:
Was going for something really simple. My last short was described as unfocused with poor camera work and editing. In it the audience had trouble really connecting with any of the characters, which was a death knell. I decided to try to make a more polished-looking short without too much cinematic noise where the story was straightforward for the time limitation. It took me a month and a half to put together the script.

I knew going in that the daydream might be seen as a cheat, which is why I tried to spend as little time in the real world as possible at the beginning. My thoughts were that the less the audience feels like they have to rewrite the narrative canon, the less they'll hate you for using the technique. The last moments, when the real world interrupts her daydream, were there to draw out the reveal and try to make it more tragic and pallatable. I wanted to link the real her and the daydream her as strongly as possible, so the audience didn't feel like this was a different character.

The tv show Ed used this technique during it's dream episode Captain Lucidity.

Workflow:
Shot HDV on an HV-20 with homemade-ish 35mm adapter - EE-A focusing screen
Had issues with the vibration blurring the image for some shots
Captured with HDV Split
Inverse Telecine with HDVPulldown
Flipped/Converted to 720x480 Huffyuv lossless avi's with HDVPulldown
Edited in Adobe Premiere Pro
After approximate picture lock, audio was rendered from APP, cleaned up in Adobe Audition (noise sampling/reduction), and then re-imported as a new audio track in Premiere Pro.
Rendered back to Huffyuv
Converted to mp4/aac in SUPER

Lighting:
Primarily used two rented Lowel Omnilights with Router Speed Controls as dimmers.
Most coloring was done on set (blue/orange gels).
Used shower curtain for minor softening at times.
One scene used a Reveal 100watt in a scoop wrapped in cinefoil as an accent.
The couch rimlight is a 2x44 studio Coollight
Tried to use the window as the primary motivated light source
Had to use the hall light during the final sequence.

Audio:
Oktava mc012 on tripod boomed overhead.
Used an Art TubeMP USB as the phantom/preamp, run into the hv20 with a 1/4" to 1/8" cable (right channel only).
Electrical noise floor wasn't really an isssue, though room noise was an issue as you can probably hear.
Almost all the off-camera Cedrick lines were ADR'ed a week later in my closet.

Score:
Scoring was done in Cakewalk using an M-Audio keystation with a sampled grand piano.

Random bits:
Didn't notice the video camera/shadow in the bathroom scene until sunday evening. I'm guessing that the reviewer might have counted that as the camera, since the official one was an old pentax SLR silhouetted on the table in the living room, and I was sure I'd get quizzed on it. The latest render removes the camera and all bathroom shadows.

The thanks at the end are for Robert, the owner of the location, and J.K. aka P!Body, who I should have given an editor's credit since his notes caused me to rework on the whole edit.

If anyone has any other questions, feel free to ask.
 
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Welcome to the fest. Ole WCS and I were unofficially competing early on, then we both sort of managed to procrastinate a bit. But we got them done in time.

It's a shame we may never find out who's short is better (according to scoring). I hear they handle rankings and stuff differently now. We sort of had a personal bet on the matter. I wonder if there is a way that we'd be able to find out. Maybe.

Best of luck, Will.
 
It's a shame we may never find out who's short is better (according to scoring). I hear they handle rankings and stuff differently now. We sort of had a personal bet on the matter. I wonder if there is a way that we'd be able to find out. Maybe.

Best of luck, Will.
Sure. Put up a general poll in the LoveFest forum and we can all vote after listening to them. Give it a time limit as well.

Mike
 
Sounds like a good idea. I think we might just find a panel of children to watch both our films and decide which is more likely to make them want to buy Sugar-Coated Crispy Bits.
 
This was unique. I liked the way you told this story – primarily one person perspective. I think it would be tough to have just one set and one person talking to a wall and keep things interesting, but you did a nice job of keeping the shots moving to keep the viewer engaged.
The audio needed some work. It was hard to hear at times. I felt that the tie together at the end could have been stronger.
 
Damn! That was really good.

You got me on that one. The story within this one is strong.
I really enjoyed it.

Technically it wasn't as strong as a lot of the others, but your story made up for it.
I'll get back to you with more later.

Mike
 
Nope. There's only one scene cut from the short, and it's likely staying on the floor because I realized it didn't say anything.

It's an imperfect beast, kholi, but I think it says what can be said with the footage I shot, so feel free to lay into the version as if it were something you paid to watch.

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I'll also add... ominous much? ;-)
 
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I thought this was really interesting, but I'm afraid I was a little confused by the ending.

Technically, there were some great shots - I particularly loved the lighting coming through the blinds. All the images look a little scrunched (from left to right) though.

Overall, I enjoyed the mystery of it, I just wish the ending had felt more satisfying, but that might be my fault for being to dumb to follow it.
 
I am very confused. I enjoyed this film on many levels but am completely lost.

There is some wonderful shots here... the window blinds (profile shot of the woman) was my favorite. Another was seeing her still shadow against the wall.

The music was perfect for the tone of this film. And speaking of the tone, I thought that you did a great job keeping the film's pace up. Especially with the intended "slow" pace.

The shot of her at the window left me very confused... in one shot her lips don't move, as if to suggest inner dialogue but in the other shot, her lips move!

I really don't know what to think here. As much as I liked what was taking place, I am so confused that it is unsettling.

I probably should hold off reviewing until I watch a second time. I am obviously missing something.

Thanks for sharing your work!

-Ted
 
Hi again. I watched your film again because it begged me to! I must say that I really like your approach in this film. There is so much meaning without beating us over the head with it. Well done!

I did have some comments that I forgot to post earlier and I would like to share them...

One, I really wanted to hear footsteps going up and down the stairs to the basement. Just the sound. I think that would have been so cool. You could almost make a "character" out of the steps. They could be heavy or light... to convey what the guy is feeling and going through.

Two, I wanted to see the door being tried to be forced open... only to be blocked by the couch, leaving the guy defeated.

Really interesting film. You have something very unique here that is beautiful in it's quiet somber.

Congrats and again, thanks for the film!

-Ted
 
Nope. There's only one scene cut from the short, and it's likely staying on the floor because I realized it didn't say anything.

It's an imperfect beast, kholi, but I think it says what can be said with the footage I shot, so feel free to lay into the version as if it were something you paid to watch.

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I'll also add... ominous much? ;-)

Oh, trust me I know all to well about it. =P nothin's perfect.

I ask because there's a lot of disjointed space for me which brought me out again and again. Like black in-between cuts, the lack of a second person at the beginning (I know that it was choice, somehow it felt like missing material though.)

I TOTALLY get what you were going after. I actually like the idea of all one person's POV, it simply felt like a bit was missing from foley, inserts, etc.

There's a pretty good idea going on here. I think, perhaps, taking the exact same content and revisiting it without the pressure of time and festival exhibition would garner some serious attention. It's unique and it has something to say.
 
I appreciate all the feedback, and I definitely see what you guys are saying (except for MDC... were you just trying not to tell me it sucked?). Thanks a lot for taking the time to comment.

I do see that some light foley would help (footsteps, door handle), so I might go back and add some of that.

I pondered writing more about my intentions, and I might closer to the end of voting, but for now I'll just say thanks and end with a question.

What did you guys think of the lead actress's performance?
 
I enjoyed your film. It was an interesting concept and one that I don't feel like I've seen a lot. I liked the starkness of the whole thing. It was well paced and didn't drag. My only issue is that I appreciate the fact that the guy's voice was muffled through the door but it caused me to miss a little of his dialogue. Maybe he could of managed to crack the door a bit and some of his voice could have escaped, although still muffled. Great job throughout.
 
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