Amnesiac

[seansshack]

Amnesiac

Tag line: What if you could get away with a murder you didn’t commit?
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[DarkElastic]

Sounds confusing, but I look forward to your entry.

 

[alex whitmer]

Hey Sean,

Welcome. Love tag line.


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[seansshack]

Cheers.

My idea is to have the main character suffering from amnesia, so figured I would continue the theme with the tag line.

 

[seansshack]

First draft done and looking promising.

 

[Nektonic]

But if you didn't commit the murder, then why would you need to "get away with it"? Good tag line though, makes me want to read the script to answer my question.

 

[seansshack]

Cause he is only witness and suspect in a murder. But the big question - was he involved or not. But the problem for our hero is he can't remember, or can he?

 

[Nektonic]

Sounds awesome seansshack. Great premise and mystery.

 

[pauly_the_hitman]

WOW sounds very interesting looking forward to this read. If I don't forget to read it. What? OK I have to go take out the what?
Pauly

 

[seansshack]

If I don't forget the story before I polish it. Doh. Too late...

 

[seansshack]

OK I'm done and really pleased with how it has turned out.

Let the games begin...

 

[Russell Moore]

I really like the tagline, I'm intrigued.

 

[seansshack]

Thanks. Seems to be doing the job if it has you intrigued

 

[seansshack]

Just pulled the trigger - uploaded!

 

[jamiejay]

intriguing. can't wait to read it.

 

[Noel Evans]

Sean I thought the pieces were really well constructed. And forgive me if it sounds cliche, but it does feel like a part of something bigger.

 

[seansshack]

It started with the idea of the opening scene, developed into a short story. Now seems like it has taken on so much life there might be a feature in there (somewhere).

Basically Jack has a lot more to go through - if I get the time to write it all down

Thanks for reading...

 

[DarkElastic]

Very well written, shame it is only a first part as nothing is answered. Good stuff.

 

[seansshack]

Somethings are answered by I wanted the story to match the theme - he may remember and piece it together or he may already remember is that he will (be left not knowing who what when and where).

But a lot is answered in the script of who is dead and who did it and why.

 

[DarkElastic]

Yes, agreed you find out who probably did it, but there could be so much more, more twists and turns to come, more to be answered and it feels that way, so you are left with wanting to read the second half - which for a script and a first film is good, but for a competition it isn't. I did enjoy the read though...