David W. Richardson
Chapelgrove Films
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Chapel Grove Films
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Alien Abduction
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Chapelgrove Films
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seansshack
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end of the beginning? interesting play on words.
with x-files being hot again, gotta help the theme...
with x-files being hot again, gotta help the theme...
David W. Richardson
Chapelgrove Films
Thanks Sean. Does it make you want to read the script??? 
seansshack
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yep. nice pic too.
David W. Richardson
Chapelgrove Films
Russell Moore
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It makes me want to read the script, nice play on words.
David W. Richardson
Chapelgrove Films
Thanks Conlan. That's the highest possible praise!
AJ Brooks
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Hope you don't mind, but my script is somewhat of a spinoff...
"Alien Obstruction"
Premise: E.T. has crash landed on earth, again. He accidentally swallows a mason jar lid, mistaking it for a reese's piece peanut butter cup. Now it is a race against time to return home with a successful bowel movement.
Gives new meaning to the classic "moon shot".
May the best script win!
"Alien Obstruction"
Premise: E.T. has crash landed on earth, again. He accidentally swallows a mason jar lid, mistaking it for a reese's piece peanut butter cup. Now it is a race against time to return home with a successful bowel movement.
Gives new meaning to the classic "moon shot".
May the best script win!
David W. Richardson
Chapelgrove Films
Oh dear....................
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David W. Richardson
Chapelgrove Films
"Alien Abduction" has been uploaded!
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seansshack
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Good luck with it and looking forward to the read...
thartley
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Thank HEAVENS! Finally!
You've had that thing ready since like the second week or something. I'm glad you got it uploaded and I cant wait to read it. :thumbup:David W. Richardson
Chapelgrove Films
Thank HEAVENS! Finally!
Thanks all! I did actually do some tweaking in the interim. Hope it made it better.
David W. Richardson
Chapelgrove Films
BTW, 'Alien Abduction' is available for anyone looking for a last-minute script for TwilightFest. Single location. Two characters. Simple, yet also challenging. PM me if you're interested.
David W. Richardson
Chapelgrove Films
CAUTION SPOILERS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Im the first!!! Well at the start of this post I am anyway...
Really liked where this went, wasnt expecting it to be the way it was, so I could read start to finish as it kept me moving.
One scene worked well in this piece. I didnt have to think location after the opener at all as I had settled on the solid description.
The MAN on the otherhand - I really had no idea about his age, look etc. From his dialogue I could get a gauge of his character, but pretty much had to make something up after I heard him talking. Kind of like walking blind for awhile.
There was one small catch for me in the story. The Man had the gray where he wanted and wasnt going to let up until he got his wife back. They gray then spun him a tale, convincing as it was, and the man believed every word and didnt mention his wife again. And there is where I felt the mans dialogue became a little strange and less believable because he went from this hard line torture approach to just letting the gray spin him a line, which at the start I felt this man wont hear any words this gray has to say.
But again I loved the story and the outcome. Was a really interesting approach that made me want to read more.
Im the first!!! Well at the start of this post I am anyway...
Really liked where this went, wasnt expecting it to be the way it was, so I could read start to finish as it kept me moving.
One scene worked well in this piece. I didnt have to think location after the opener at all as I had settled on the solid description.
The MAN on the otherhand - I really had no idea about his age, look etc. From his dialogue I could get a gauge of his character, but pretty much had to make something up after I heard him talking. Kind of like walking blind for awhile.
There was one small catch for me in the story. The Man had the gray where he wanted and wasnt going to let up until he got his wife back. They gray then spun him a tale, convincing as it was, and the man believed every word and didnt mention his wife again. And there is where I felt the mans dialogue became a little strange and less believable because he went from this hard line torture approach to just letting the gray spin him a line, which at the start I felt this man wont hear any words this gray has to say.
But again I loved the story and the outcome. Was a really interesting approach that made me want to read more.
David W. Richardson
Chapelgrove Films
Thanks Noel! I appreciate the feedback. I'll have to re-read the script with your comments in mind. More on that later.
Thanks again!
Thanks again!
David W. Richardson
Chapelgrove Films
*****SPOILERS******
Okay, the Gray told the Man his wife would be returned unharmed any minute now. So the Man has relaxed about that a little bit, and turned his focus to other things -- like the fact that he's got a living, breathing space alien sitting in his basement, and it speaks English!
At least, that was my thinking....
Okay, the Gray told the Man his wife would be returned unharmed any minute now. So the Man has relaxed about that a little bit, and turned his focus to other things -- like the fact that he's got a living, breathing space alien sitting in his basement, and it speaks English!
At least, that was my thinking....
Ill read it again at the end, of course with that in mind. Sorry, just wanted to add, the mistake in a scene was not clear to me. Was it that the gray allowed himself to be captured and then suffered death as a result?